Hey there, thanks for your comments on my page! Your outline is looking good and I particularly LOVE the picture you have use. Coming from someone who needs lots of sleep to function, I'm really interested to read your chapter once it's completed. ShaunaB 03:02, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
Hi Ben your page is looking great mate! I particularily love the graphs.. very good way of getting complicated material across. The outline looks really interesting too! I really like how you have broken sleep down to different sections. Maybe you could elaborate on a few more sleep disorders such as hypersomnia and the effects on happiness :)(Psych 125 12:51, 30 October 2011 (UTC))
Hey, really interesting topic! Looking forward to reading more! Feel free to link to my facial expression page when you get to that part! Would be interested to learn if humans actually need 8 hours of sleep per night, or if that's actually just a myth? Tashc 09:01, 31 October 2011 (UTC)
This is fantastic work - a really great lay out & illustrations (loved the Van Gogh) - congratulations - very well done - Magnolia
Hi there, I am really looking forward to reading your final version! I love sleeping! An extra 10minutes always feels like heaven! I agree with Tashc, I am also interested in learning whether human really need 8 hours of sleep per night. Good luck with the rest, will make more suggestions once you upload more :) SKM1501 03:29, 02 November 2011 (UTC)
Overall, this chapter provides a good overview of the psychological functional of sleep and its relation to emotion and, to some extent, with happiness. The chapter would benefit from expanding the focus on the sleep and happiness relationship, particularly as this is the main purpose of the chapter. The section on sleep disorders could be significantly reduced or approached differently - is the implication here that disorders reduce happiness and that sleep problems could cause these disorders - or vice-versa - or both? (It doesn't seem to me that this section, in particular, is clearly addressing the point the chapter - sleep and happiness. The therapy section seems to contain a mixture of psychological therapies and sleep therapies. More conceptual clarity is needed here.)
A wide range of theory is presented (good), but too little related directly to sleep and happiness (to improve) - make sure content and structure follows the purpose and explains its relation to the purpose in a disciplined and clear manner
Overall, this presentation makes effective use of self-video with the author in bed (waking up from sleep) as an effective motif. The presentation is also notable for its interviewing of a sleep disorders expert. The content could have been more clearly focused on the connection between and happiness (and less on sleep disorders and brain wave states).
In the general introduction, perhaps highlight self-help focus questions
The link between sleep brain wave states etc. and happiness is not clearly established (what is the connection?)
The interview with the expert about sleep disorders added particular interest; again though the focus seems to be on sleep disorders, whilst more could have been made of the sleep-happiness connection.