Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Relationships and happiness

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Comments on chapter plan[edit]

This is looking pretty comprehensive Tabitha J. Well doneU112052 06:27, 19 September 2011 (UTC)

Just a thought. It may be good to add a section on how popular culture distorts the meaning of happiness. If this is a self-help book, maybe readers ought to know that people should not be pursuing the New Idea/Women's Day notion of relationships/happiness because it does not exist!121.223.199.239 07:57, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
By the way, that was me again..Still getting used to Wiki-world and forgot to log inU112052 07:59, 19 September 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, Your page looks like you have made great progress. Well done. You have inspired me. I really like the clear layout, and the way it progresses logically.I like the idea of adding the psychopathology of poor relationships, as it flips the question around. Good creative way to address the topic. Your research is so thorough, but it may be good to add a little more 'self help' flavour to one or two sections. Like what you have in the pink text box, simple questions about quality of relationships. This is really good, and maybe you could integrate more of these sort of promotins questions into the introduction of 1 or 2 sections/ paragraphs, to draw the reader in, before adding your research. (Your research is so thorough, this is not a criticism, it is more to address the "bookish" nature of our assignment. Keep what you have, just add a bit of fluff!) Your reference list is so thorough. I like how you have added outside links. Very thoughtful. Jay-bird 02:32, 17 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, Looks great and reads well; very informative. Noted one error in the Social Relationships: the building blocks.... 3rd sentence, second line, reference should read Walker-Andrews et. al (date). It's hard to avoid the scientific requirement (as we have talked about before) so Jay-bird's comment above is probably right - but I'd drag people in at the introduction stage. I'd be cautious about too much fluff if I was you, but it wouldn't stop me lol. AlexMC 04:28, 23 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, page is looking awesome. I see near the end that you have added a section on psychopathology and relationships. I was thinking if you feel it is relevant if you wanted to add anything on personality disorders such as borderline personality disorder which has a focus on dysfunctional relationship patterns and how that comes about. (Benk 07:33, 23 October 2011 (UTC))

Great job, your chapter looks really good and the content seems precise. I dont have much advice to add to the above comments, looks good! AngeM 08:05, 23 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, the chapter is looking great. It never ceases to amaze me how difficult it can be to define emotions and feelings, such as those associated with happiness. I found your chapter to be very informative and concepts are clearly defined. I also found the links to Wikipedia excellent - which left your chapter uncluttered by 'busy' explanations. I also think the 'explanatory terms' at the bottom are useful for the reader. Impressive ref list too!! Congrats. Crazydaisy 23:46, 24 October 2011 (UTC)Crazydaisy

Hi Tabitha, As requested, I checked out your changes, and yes, I think they are spot on. Your introduction and quote set a lighter inital tone now and introduce the topic in a self-help, 'how does psych help me in life' kind of way.

I think the story about Michelle is a good example. Maybe put a space between your text and the explanation, as they run together a little, so that your explanation is easily accessed. You have made the link between Michelle's story and Erikson's theory, but you could possibly go further & explain that she needs relatedness, but her past relationships make this difficult.

The key terms add a professional touch. Not sure if they were there before, or if they are new. I clicked on the internal links, and was happy that my chapter was linked - thanks! I am inspired to put internal links on my chapter when I get to that stage. How do I do that?

Also, your title has helped to clarify what I need to do with my page. Thanks for this idea, as I have been trying to work out how to improve my title. Your initial statement & then a follow up question makes things very clear, & guides the readers' thoughts right from the start. Will see what I can come up with in a similar way for my chapter. thanks Tabitha, Jay-bird 06:23, 25 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter looks amazing. Well done! How does your topic relate to mutually exclusive relationships, marriage? Matching hypothesis? Or is this beyond the scope of your work? Miz.mira 09:02, 25 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha. I thought I'd take a look just to see how you were getting on. I reckon your chapter is great, Tabitha.AlexMC 12:54, 25 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, Thanks for commenting on my page - much appreciated! And your chapter looks great. I really like to quiz idea. In answer to your question on my page: I would love to go into why fad diets don't work and I think I want to focus that on the restaint and release theory as well as the conflicting goal theory.. so stay tuned. Thanks again Claremw 05:47, 27 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, Just came back for another snoop. I like what you have done and I'm glad to see you have simplified with out dumb-ifying ;-)Well done. Ray U112052 05:42, 30 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, i have had a look at your page and it looks good :) very interesting, only thing i saw was that your quiz questions are numbered all 1. If you like you can go to my page and grab the coding for my Quiz so that it

numbers the questions and shuffles them too :)

Shelley WestS

Fantastic chapter - great quiz - Magnolia

Initial draft comments[edit]

I've taken a quick look and here's comments.

Well done on getting this draft up for comment well ahead of time. I've made some minor edits to heading levels and some minor copyedits and skimmed through. For the research component, it could be helpful to identify any meta-analyses of happiness which include social relations as predictors. The effect sizes from such studies could provide a strong empirical basis for informing claims about the role of social relationships and happiness. Perhaps also it would be helpful to explain how/why social relations affect happiness. This may already be covered. The other key point is that I've added the sub-title, which provides a focus question, and to continue using the focus question as the guiding structure for the chapter. To that end, you might add an Overview at the start and Conclusion at the end which really hones in the focus question and the take-home, practical self-help messages based on psychological science.

There are some connections which probably should be made to the Eudaimonic well-being chapter - perhaps more internal links within the text.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:25, 23 October 2011 (UTC)

Since we both like philosophy I thought you might like Aristotles take on friendship. According to Aristotle we have utility, pleasure and Self love of virtue being the strongest of the types.Miz.mira 11:45, 25 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, Your chapter looks great! Good effort. You have covered alot. In addition to relevant content, the quiz at the end is an effetcive way to finish your chapter. AngeM 12:32, 30 October 2011 (UTC)

Hello. Really like the chapter, it is very informative and I can definetly say I've learnt something. I was just wondering though, if culture or socialisation may impact on what happiness is classified as and whether the importance of self happiness may be over rided by the happiness of the communitiy one is in. Basically: what is the difference (if any) between happiness in individualistic cultures and collectivist cultures? Perhaps this is a little far fetched and goes beyond the understanding of what you are trying to provide our audience (and our word limit!), it really is just a thought that passed through my mind. I think the quizes are wonderful too. U3033746 11:54, 31 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, your chapter looks wonderful and has great information. I like your view on Eudaimonia, its a very interesting topic. Feel free to offer some feedback, I still have a long way to go. (Susann 07:43, 1 November 2011 (UTC))

Hey Tabitha, I just wanted to say great job. Youre page is full of nothing but amazing work. definitely one of the leading chapters. You have clearly read widely and know what you are talking about. I commend your effort. Keep up the good work :) Atice 01 14:18, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi, I saw you asking for help on the moodle forums with your quiz number's because they were all stuck on one, so i changed it so it was numbers, 1, 2, 3, 4 is that what your were after? hope this helped :) Momentai 04:01, 3 November 2011 (UTC) No worries, glad i could help. I will most likely cover the effects of lack of sleep, though i'm not sure about in relation to overeating and obesity, but they could end up in there somewhere! Also your chapter is looking amazing, good work :) Momentai 10:21, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha, I hope you don't mind but I have put a link to your Chapter in my BC (Volunteerism). Let me know if this is not acceptable and I will erase it. Thx for your encouraging comments on my page.Crazydaisy 07:56, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Tabitha - your page looks great. Good use of pictures to accompany the content. I also like the the example next to Eriksons theory - its good to have an applied example after explainging a theory. 137.92.97.111 01:44, 6 November 2011 (UTC)


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall comments
    1. This chapter is an exceptional example of a self-help topic on relationships and happiness.

Theory[edit]

  1. Theory comments
    1. Multiple relevant theories are applied to the topic, including SDT, positive psychology (meaning or sense of coherence, eudaimonic happiness), Erikson’s psychosocial development, and personality and happiness (NEO).
    2. Mention of McClelland’s social need for affiliation might add further to the topic.

Research[edit]

  1. Research comments
    1. Fantastic reporting of a meta-analysis and associated correlations and effect sizes.
    2. Discussion of research methodology and limitations demonstrates critical analysis.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression comments
    1. Great introductory quote perfectly applied to the topic.
    2. Try to avoid contractions; although this is a self-help chapter, adherence to formal APA style is encouraged.
    3. Poignant pictures and captions accompany key components of the text.
    4. Key points are well-highlighted in concept boxes, especially the final take-home message that fosters reflection on relationship aspects to improve happiness.
    5. The reference lists demonstrates APA style and is very extensive.

Rfoster 06:32, 28 November 2011 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this multimedia presentation uses a web-cam / reading text style, with a melancholy masquerade character reflecting on a book about relationships and happiness received from her mother. Overall, the "angle" works well, but the reading out of content was somewhat dry and monotone. Perhaps highlighting fewer, but key points and illustrating with examples could have made for a more effective communication of the chapter content?

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Some more structure could have helped (or more explanation of the structure in the initial introduction.
  2. Content was thorough but perhaps overly detailed.

Communication[edit]

  1. Where can the book (chapter) be found? (Refer and link back to the Wikiversity chapter)
  2. More info about the structure - e.g., the goals/questions could help.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Audio was:
    1. difficult to hear (probably needed an external microphone closer)
    2. somewhat monotone
  2. No title or references?
  3. Limited description.
  4. Unlisted video?
  5. Would you consider releasing under a creative commons license?

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:27, 9 December 2011 (UTC)