Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Maslow's hierarchy of needs

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Looking great so far! Really keen to see where you go with this, very interesting topic! Jackson997 04:10, 7 September 2011 (UTC)

Going well, current content is clear and straightforward. However, is the bullet point list for physiological needs formatted correctly? Jackson997 03:03, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey Alex, I'm a little confused as to what you mean about the physiological needs being formatted correctly? They look fine to me. The bullet points are only temporary. I'm just organising myself before I put everything into words. Skachwalla 05:40, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi, in response to your question on Moodle, i am yet to try it but i thought i'd let you know about it... in the editing section, click on 'advanced' so a drop drown section comes up. There is an icon that has three lines with a little plus sign on it, if you hold your mouse over it it will come up with 'indentation'. If you put your cursor where you want the indentation, then press that button it should work. Hopefully it does Ashleetronerud 09:35, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Thanks once again Ashlee. Skachwalla 10:08, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

I love how you've broken up the information into the colour boxes :-) Makes it easy to read. Good luck adding more content! KristaLeanne 10:46, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi there, Your page is looking great! I was just wondering if I could link your page to a section on mine relating to Malow and optimal experience. Thanks!Trinand 11:25, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey Sabrina. I've had a read of your page and I think the content is really good - I have learned a few things actually :-) Particularly I like the part about "freedom to speak, freedom to defend yourself" etc. The only suggestion I would make is to put a pretty title page at the top, and add a few images. There would be quite a few images that would be directly relevant, or abstractly relevant to your content. Just a suggestion though :-) Great job! TabithaJ 08:08, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

This is a really good chapter - should be published in a psychology book - well done - Magnolia

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Overall Overall comments The chapter presentation is attractive with good use of text boxes to structure the content, images to illustrate the needs hierarchy, and a quiz as a useful learning feature. The main areas for improvement are proofreading, APA style, and extending the scope of research. Theory Theory comments A general description of the theory before launching into the fine details would strengthen this chapter, including its basic assumptions (e.g., progressive fulfilment towards self-actualisation). Critiquing of the theory in terms of the limitations of the order of the hierarchy and its generalisability to other cultures was well done. Research Research comments The chapter could benefit from a wider range of references and more recent research. For example, the chapter could mention Wahba and Bridwell’s (1976) research on an alternative model of growth and deficiency needs and Maslow’s research on the characteristics of self-actualised individuals (see tutorial 6 notes). Inclusion of the hierarchy figure was a great explanatory image for the theory, although captioning would have assisted. Written expression Written expression comments Expression was at times wordy and difficult to follow. For example: “He aimed to develop a theory that positive valid theory of motivation the satisfied the following demands” reads like a draft version and could benefit from further proofreading prior to submission. “Her mouth is constantly, especially during the hotter months” – constantly what? Dry? Spelling and grammar could also be improved. Proofreading may assist in identifying words that were used unintentionally or accidentally left out while typing (e.g., so->some, juts-> just, evacuated->evicted, Psychopathetic, well belling etc) Try to avoid contractions in formal writing (e.g., isn't, can’t, don’t). APA style was not consistently maintained throughout text. Check citations, number format etc. Be aware that paraphrasing is more than just changing one or two words in a sentence. The text boxes and content structure were well done. The layout was logical with a discussion of each set of needs in turn, followed by a summary and quiz. It was also good to see the Australian spelling of self-actualisation as the American spelling is usually a common mistake.

Rfoster 02:54, 28 November 2011 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this presentation uses a combination of web-cam and diagrams to provide a basic overview of Maslow's hierarchy of needs. Structure and content In the general introduction, outline the self-help focus questions and/or explain what will be covered in this presentation. Outline the general principles in MHON (e.g., that lower needs to be met before higher needs are pursued. (Well explained response to this principle). Make clear what is based on theory, research, and what is your personal opinion (these should be distinguished). A summary of pros and cons, with take-home messages based on theory and research would be helpful (it's not clear whether the recommendations in this presentation are personal opinion). Communication More examples or other illustration or concepts would be helpful. Narration/audio is clear and well-paced. Production quality Audio quality is good. Picture quality is good. Provide attribution and acknowledgement to copyright owner of image. Consider licensing the presentation under a Creative Commons license. Provide a link back to the book chapter. Production quality

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:42, 11 December 2011 (UTC)