Sup Guys, Hope someone truly gets some benefit From this chapter. Ill be puttin some things up shortly, if i can work all these awesome formatting ways, that I see in other peoples chapters ENVIOUS!!!!!, Any tips on making my page look nice and shiny, let me KNOW!!! Lucas K1 11:07, 30 October 2011 (UTC)
Hi Lucas - thanks for your comments on my page! If you would to hi-jack any of the formatting etc from my page, go right ahead! So interested to read your chapter as well! ShaunaB 06:12, 31 October 2011 (UTC)
This topic looks great. Can't wait to read it when you're done Noodles&Wedges 07:17, 1 November 2011 (UTC)
This chapter was a great read! I know its very close to submission, but if you happen to re-look at your chapter, I would suggest a few more pictures! The beginnning looks very appealing, however later on it seems a bit full on with just text....a few pictures will spread out the information. Just a suggestion :) SKM1501 07:27, 07 November 2011 (UTC)
Really well researched - a fantastic chapter - well done - Magnolia
Overall, there is a lot to like about this chapter and there is a lot that could be improved. Strengths include that the chapter tackles a somewhat taboo topic (motivation behind infidelity) using relevant theory and research, and in doing so embraces the self-help book style for the exercise. The main areas for improvement is with regard to the clarity of written expression.
The chapter effectively explains evolutionary/biological, need, and personality theories about infidelity. This theoretical structure provided an excellent framework for the chapter.
There is an awkwardness to the underlying pre-supposition for the chapter. The chapter argues but also seems to assume that monogamy is desirable. This is a normative viewpoint, and probably should be acknowledged as such. The chapter also assumes heterosexual relationships, but this isn't clearly justified e.g., I'm not sure why infidelity wouldn't be just as applicable to homosexual relationships? Thirdly, the chapter often seems to assume a male audience, although the initial introduction (I've adjusted it now) suggested a target audience of people who have had others cheat on them. In contrast, the target audience for the book, ideally, would be all people!
Several statements are either unreferenced or personal opinion. I've placed some [factual?] templates to suggest places where citations could be appropriate. As a result, sometimes it is difficult to know what is a statement based on theory/evidence, and what is a personal view of the author(s).
The chapter seems to draw a confident conclusion that testosterone being the key to understanding infidelity. Again, is this personal opinion, or supported by empirical evidence? Is this only true for males? What about T in female infidelity?
Research on infidelity is discussed in relation to the theories. This is very helpful for integrating research with theory, but research could also have been used outside of this structure, which could have helped to downplay personal opinion and upplay demonstrated familarity with psychological literature on the topic - e.g., for the Introduction - how common is infidelity?
When describing important research findings, try to indicate the size of effects in addition to whether there was an effect or relationship.
The written expression for the chapter is reasonably good, but the style was perhaps overly informal. The coverage of academic content was good, but there seemed to be too much enthusiasm to share personal opinion in addition to conveying what psychological science has discovered about the problem in question.
The chapter could have benefited from a more carefully developed Introduction, with clear focus questions relating to the broad target audience for the self-help book.
Getting early comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to further improve the chapter.
Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
The summary needs significant development in order to become a synthesis of what is known in psychological science about the motivational problem, with a clear take-away message.