Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Growth through adversity

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Jude, I think your chapter looks and reads fantastically! To tie in with our 'self-help' theme, my only suggestion at this point would be to include something on how people turn trauma into an opportunity for growth - what motivates them? what makes one person more likely to use trauma for personal growth than the next? You could possibly include some examples e.g. someone experices sexual abuse and through the recovery process is able to rebuild a lost connection with family members. I look forward to reading the finished product! ShaunaB 04:25, 19 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Jude. Thanks for your kind comments on my page :-) Yours looks beautiful! I really love the Tree of Life picture, and the quote. It gives your page a feeling of emotional depth. I was wondering about the concept of rumination. It was really interesting to read that rumination can be positive, as I'd always associated it with a negative. Specifically, I remember reading a few articles about how women in particular are prone to negative rumination. This could be something to consider for your page; i.e. when to know if the rumination is becoming negative and harmful? Anyway, just a thought. Keep going - your page looks amazing! TabithaJ 22:49, 22 October 2011 (UTC)

Hey Jude. I've added some of your suggestions to my "relationships and happiness" page - I've added a text box with a story (about Michelle) and also in my intro I've tried to make my languaging a little more "self-help-ish". Just wondering if you would mind having a quick look when you get a chance to tell me if you think it's ok? Thanks :-) TabithaJ 05:47, 23 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter is amazing well done- I know that you already have an example but I found another example Stephen Hawking on wiki. He is very inspirational. Good luck with your chapter in progress Miz.mira 09:11, 25 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi, I love your chapter. I have just been reading an book chapter on Optimism and the content of your page ties in beautifully with that theme. Well doneCrazydaisy 05:57, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

And... just noticed your referencing in your first para (Triplett et al., 2011) - should the first ref be all authors' names in full, then et al for following in txt refs? Also, Triplett spelling is incorrect at end of first para + no et al (you can tell I'm grasping at straws for something to comment on!!)Crazydaisy 06:04, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

I'm really impressed by your book chapter, very intersting and fantastic pictures. (Susann 12:15, 2 November 2011 (UTC))

Draft comments[edit source]

I've had a quick look - here's some comments:

  • Overall - Great job, these is coming together really well - the structure, depth, tone, content is all looking solid, so these suggestions are relatively minor
  • Check APA style for citation formatting e.g., , et al. -> et al.
  • Frankl: A key point from Man's Search for Meaning is that Frankl wondered why some survived and some didn't in the concentration camps - he observed and came to understand that those for whom the experience had meaning and purpose were more likely to find the will to survive (and therefore more likely to survive).
  • Sense of Coherence - Antovosky - this is a closely related concept from a contemporary (or a little later) of Frankl's - and warrants consideration
  • PTGI - Revise this to more clearly address: What does it measure? (e.g., The extent to which personal growth occurred following a traumatic experience?) How many factors are there? What are they? (e.g., Maybe a summary table of factors and definitions). Which items relate to which factors? Or are these 10 items measuring one overall factor?
  • Nick Vujicic - Could provide a link to youtube video of Nick
  • Move the meaning making section with Armstrong quote to the Summary or Conclusion section. Move the quote so that you finish the chapter in your own words.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:33, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

Multimedia[edit source]

Jude - your multimedia is great! It's so well spoken - you have such a friendly voice! Well done!!! ShaunaB 06:10, 13 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi - This is a great chapter - presentation & video wonderful - well done & congratulations - Magnolia

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, This is an excellent, all-around high quality chapter. It presents an interesting, indepth, yet succint explanation and exploration of post-trauma growth. The realities of trauma are not over-romanticised, yet the option and role of growth-orientations is illustrated through theory, research, example, and images, with useful links to other relevant resources.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theories are well covered, including excellent background theory based on Frankl, as well as more contemporary perspectives.

Research[edit source]

  1. Effective use is made of several research studies; the results are well understood and presented.
  2. PTGI discussion and items was also very useful - added depth and detail, and facilitated the self-help component.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The chapter is notable for being particularly well written and presented.
    1. The chapter benefits from a well-develop Introduction.
    2. Real-life examples are used, with links to more info/video.
    3. Early drafting and getting comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft helped to improve the chapter.
    4. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Learning features
    1. Wiki mastery is very evident!
    2. Some interwiki-links were provided - more have been added.
    3. PTGI items were useful.
    4. Perhaps a self-reflection section - e.g., think about a time in your life when it was particularly difficult but you grew a lot as well - how did you respond? What did you do?
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading was excellent.
    1. Use hyphens e.g., for well-being, self-schema, etc.
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:21, 24 November 2011 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a well-organised and effectively recorded presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Structure is clear.
  2. Content is well-selected.
  3. No summary? (There was another 30 seconds).
  4. Use of Frankl example engaging.
  5. Room perhaps for other examples?

Communication[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a strong, all-round, simple, but effective communication of the key concepts.
  2. Pacing is excellent. (Many presentations went too fast).

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Slides were well-prepared - not too much text.
  2. Animated bullet-points worked well to focus attention.
  3. Lovely speaking voice, with very good intonation.
  4. Well done on using Wiki Commons images and including links.
  5. Licensing for this presenation? Consider releasing under Creative Commons Attribution.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:01, 9 December 2011 (UTC)