Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Grief

Comments

This is a very interesting chapter - particularly the section on anticipatory grief - but nothing prepares the individual for the actual death - would like to see some researcher delve into this. - Well done - Magnolia

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Overall Overall comments Theory Theory comments Discussion of of Bowlby’s theory of attachment as applied to grief and Kubler Ross’ stage theory of grief identifies limitations, demonstrating critical analysis. A variety of relevant theories are discussed in detail, including theories extending beyond the scope of material presented in the unit, while integrating them with important concepts that were covered, such as meaning, self-concept, and emotional regulation. Research Research comments Studies mentioned in text are well-described to illustrate key assertions and use further research to extend and support findings. Inclusion of effect size would strengthen this discussion. The list of references is expansive and relies on multiple recent findings. The self-help focus of the chapter was evident in the managing and overcoming grief section; the intervention studies used to address this component were quite insightful. Written expression Written expression comments The chapter started and ended well, with definitions of grief (differentiating between mourning, grief and bereavement) upfront, and a key points summary at the end. This chapter effectively utilised the additional features available in the wiki platform; the quote set up the topic from the very beginning, boxes assisted in highlighting the stages of grief, images (with poignant accompanying captions) were evocative and illustrated the key points beautifully, and the quiz was a great learning feature. There were minimal errors throughout; however, be careful with some word use (affect/effect, Inedibility->inevitability). APA style was in general expertly handled; however, try to avoid contractions.

Rfoster 00:04, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an effective, solid presentation, using well-prepared slides with well-articulated audio. Perhaps less detailed content and more emphasis on focus questions and take-home messages could help to improve the presentation. Structure and content General introduction succeeds in getting attention and establishing interest Initial slides provide useful meta-info and contextual info. Perhaps establish focus questions and/or provide quick overview of what will be covered The content is well-structured and provides a comprehensive, knowledgeable overview. Perhaps establish connection between emotion and grief The presentation ends without providing a summary or take-home messages Communication The content is well communicated via audio and visuals. Audio is clear. Audio could use more tonal range to facilitate interest and attention. Perhaps more images could be used. Perhaps more examples could be used. Production quality Slides make effective use of colour and animation, with high contrast making it easy to read; font size could be a little larger Well done on using Wiki Commons images with attribution. Consider using a Creative Commons Attribution license so that this presentation can be re-used by others.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:35, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

Correction - thanks for using a Creative Commons Attribution license (at the start of the presentation) - much appreciated. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:05, 16 December 2011 (UTC)