Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Altruism

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Hi Typify, Just saw your comments on my Chapter page (Gambling). Thanks. I haven't looked too much at Risk yet, but when I do, I'll keep an eye out for literature on risk associated with Altruism. AlexMC 11:25, 18 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi there Typify, your topic is of particular interest because the concept of 'altruism' features large in my subject of Volunteerism. I look forward to reading more. I have a few articles on altruistic motivations as they relate to volunteerism, if you are interested Crazydaisy 23:02, 24 October 2011 (UTC)Crazydaisy

If you need some good references for the origins of altruistic motivations, try this article: Rutte, C., & Pfeiffer, T. (2009). Evolution of reciprocal altruism by copying observed behaviour. Current Science (00113891), 97(11), 1573-1578. And if you need a model for a starter, try this one: Trivers, R. (1971). The Evolution of Reciprocal Altruism. The Quarterly Review of Biology, 46(1), 35-57. Jackson997 07:04, 31 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Typify,

Your chapter is going well although it is a little text heavy - maybe some images or colour to lighten it up? I found the Nazi story both uplifting and saddening. I wonder how it affects others when they read it? I am going to add a link to your page in my chapter as I have some info on alturism and volunteerism. A good ref I am using is Graziano, W. G., Habashi, M. M., Tobin, R. M., & Sheese, B. E. (2007). Agreeableness empathy and helping: A person x situation perspective. Journal of Personality and Social Psychology, 93(4), 583-599. doi: 10.1037/0022-3514.93.4.583. I am looking forward to reading more :) Ltb 05:28, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Typify, your chapter is looking really good. This topic reminds me of the article used in social psych this semester. Based on Kitty Genovese, who was killed in New York, and all the bystanders ignored or believed someone else was helping her. (The Bystander effect.) Maybe if more of the bystanders had high levels of altruism, maybe she would not have died. Here is a link to the article *: http://web.ebscohost.com.ezproxy1.canberra.edu.au/ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?sid=da32013f-253d-42c1-965c-4daaa7864be1%40sessionmgr113&vid=2&hid=105 Good luck with your chapter :) Jemmasanderson 03:11, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey Typify. Great topic you have here and your content is really clear. The only suggestion I have is to separate your "key terms" and your "reference list" so the page flows a little more smoothly. Also at the bottom you could add some links to internal pages in the Motivation book. Just suggestions though :-) Have a great day, TabithaJ 08:12, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi, Hope you don't mind I just did some minor spelling edits. You can view it in the 'view history' section and just double check! Content looks really good, great balance between theoritcal, practical and easy to understand. Well done! Naomi 11:22, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

I really like that you talked about the dark side of altruism thought that added a edgy side to the chaper EamesA 12:19, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Comment by Magnolia - interesting reading about Father Kolbe - very good analysis - well done


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a useful chapter about the motivation behind altruism. The major theoretical perspectives are well covered and a good attempt is to made to present these theories in a readable manner. Some research is referred to, but in a limited way. Some basic learning features are provided e.g., definitions of key terms and an example. The quality of written expression was somewhat problematic. Main improvements could be more succint expression and more thorough copyediting for grammar and APA style.

Theory[edit]

  1. Key motivational theories are explained, including evolutionary, biological, and social perspectives.
  2. Some improvements have been added to help the Why question become more clear in the introductory sections.
  3. The Father Maximilian Kolbe example provided a powerful illustration. Smiley.svg

Research[edit]

  1. Several useful, relevant studies are described to illustrate theoretical principles.
  2. Despite this, overall extent research referencing seemed somewhat minimal/limited e.g., note where [factual?] has been added.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. The main concepts were effectively communicated.
    2. The enthusiastic individual flair in writing style was encouraging, however there was a tendency towards over-writing. Keep it simple. Leave out unnecessary words. For examples, see my edits.
  2. Learning features
    1. Wiki links could be added e.g., Father Maximilian Kolbe
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. More proofreading and copyediting is needed. See my edits for examples.
  4. APA style
    1. Basic referencing format provided, but more editing needed to bring it to full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:31, 25 November 2011 (UTC)


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  1. Overall, This presentation is to be commended for creative effort in using self-video and a variety of locations, props etc. The style, in the end, works well (nice conclusion), but could be improved by presenting less content, more slowly and interactively.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Structure was OK; but an overview could help to explain what will be covered
  2. Content could have been improved by being more selective and emphasising/illustrating just the key points.
  3. Content was notable for its depth.

Communication[edit]

  1. Overall, the on-camera, variety-of-campus-locations communication style was effective and refreshing.
  2. Main recommendation is to to slow down - this was a bit of a machine-gun!

Production quality[edit]

  1. Excellent overall production quality
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:35, 9 December 2011 (UTC)