Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Alcohol motivation

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Comments[edit source]

Hi, I'm looking forward to your chapter! This is a very big topic these days. Alcohol seems to fuel a lot of negatives and not a lot of positives. In particular I’m interested in the effects alcohol has on society’s younger population. There are not many events you can go to now, either sporting or music based for example that alcohol isn't a huge part of. Here are some links to some interesting studies I’ve looked at: Good luck with your chapter :) Jemmasanderson 02:56, 4 November 2011 (UTC)Reply[reply]

This would make a great magazine article - submit this to publishers - very well done - Magnolia

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is fabulous chapter. It demonstrates a comprehensive understanding of motivational theory and research on alcohol consumptions, offers a balanced, critical viewpoint, and successfully embraces the self-help theme for the book.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Excellent coverage of key theories, backed up by research and critical thinking, with examples

Research[edit source]

  1. Thorough coverage of relevant research.
  2. Contextualised to the Australian setting, where useful/appropriate.
  3. Studies are used as examples.
  4. Size of effects were reported.
  5. Perhaps review meta-analyses on the topic?

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter is particularly well-written - it is easy to read, yet informative.
    2. The structure is logical, easy to follow.
    3. Focus questions are established and well-answered.
    4. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Learning features
    1. Some interwiki links are provided; more could be added
    2. Some images are used; more could be added (e.g. perhaps graphs of research findings?)
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Well-drafted; only a few, minor errors found.
    2. Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
  4. APA style
    1. In-text citations were well utilised, including secondary citations
    2. Reference list is in excellent APA style, although wiki formatting hasn't yet been applied for italics.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:01, 28 November 2011 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this was a basic, bullet-point slide and narrated audio video.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The structure could be explained in the general introduction
  2. Content was sound but quite detailed; suggest zooming out and focusing more on key points.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Pauses between slides seemed to be too long.
  2. Slower narration would allow the points to sink in.
  3. Increase intonation - to facilitate attention and interest.
  4. More examples could be used

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Production quality
  2. Audio was quite quiet and there was some white noise
  3. Well done on providing a link back to the chapter
  4. What is the license for this presentation?
  5. What is the attribution and license for the images?

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:49, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply[reply]