Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Addiction

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Hello Alex just wondering if there is still more to come with your chapter plan. I like where it is going so far. Skachwalla 03:58, 7 September 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the discussion post! I thought I'd get organised and start it as soon as possible. Keep watching this space, as I'm aiming to put up more content sometime this weekend/early next week. Jackson997 04:00, 7 September 2011 (UTC)

Hey Jackson. I like what you've done so far! I was thinking you could look at having a text box with a list of some of the addictions out there (i.e. to show the broad range of addictions, from shopping to sex to drugs). Anyway, just a suggestion. Thanks and keep up the good work, TabithaJ 05:02, 24 September 2011 (UTC).

Hi Jackson, I also like your chapter so far. I have some information on addiction I hope you may find helpful. This is from the book 'Theory of Addiction' by Robert West (2006) from library long term loan. Definition: Addiction may be viewed as a symptom rather than a disorder on its own. It may develop from many different pathologies and vary in severity and manifestion. It involves a chronic condition of the motivational system.where there is an abnormally and damaging high priority given to a particular behavior. There are three basic types of pathologies underlying addiction; 1. Abnormalies in the motivational system not directly caused by the addictive activity (eg, chronic anxiety, depression, low impulse control or self esteem). 2. Abnormalies in the motivational system caused by the addictive activity, (eg, sensitisation to the effects of stimulant drugs, tolerance & withdrawal and mood disturbance). 3. Pathological environmental factors affecting motivation, (eg, social relationships, access, highly distressing circumstances). Hi - This is an excellent chapter - well researched and very interesting - congratulations - Magnolia

West (2006) suggests the antecedants of addiction maybe a balance of forces, for example; individual differences (physiological susceptibility, personality traits, belief & values), activity related factors (degree of satisfaction, reward, tapping into incentive learning systems and causing neuro-adaptation amplifing effects of such reward), and environmental factors (opportunity, cues, social norms). (West, 2006). Hope this is helpful,still practicing with feedback Susann 12:41, 31 October 2011 (UTC)

Hey Alex! Thanks for your feedback on my page. Your page looks great, your outline covers everything youd expect from your topic. i also like that you have approached it from from more than one way, i.e neurological basic and then conditioning principles also. I tihnk it will make it a well rounded and informative chapter. I cant wait to read more! Courtney.reis 04:49, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey Alex. I like what you have done. Your intro works really well. I like the example of "modern" addictions, such as Facebook, and how you generalise it by writing it in a way that makes it common. I think it kind of removes the stigma associated with it. I also think mentioning the origins is a good idea. Your referencing looks great (oh on a side note you don't know it but you've helped me with my referencing, thanks). Can't wait to take another look at it before you submit it. Good luck! Skachwalla 03:11, 4 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey Alex, just a suggestion. The box down the page that is quite bright, maybe you could consider changing it to a theme box, like the green one on my page. I just think it is a little bright. Otherwise looking great. Noodles&Wedges 11:28, 5 November 2011 (UTC) Just read through it, let me know when you put up the rest. I assume there will be more because it is 300 words short. You could write alot about methadone programs for heroin addicts. Just because heroin is a very addictive and dangerous drug. Withdrawal from it is terrible and the high on it is great (apparently, I wouldn't know). Anyway, love what you have done with the box. I have made my chapter shorter by 10 words and now it sits at 4492. Good luck with the rest Noodles&Wedges 03:41, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Haha Alex, you always worry for no reason! Your information is great and thorough... you now just need to concentrate on presenting it in a more easy-to-read format. Nothing that putting some space between your information and breaking it up into more paragraphs can't fix! Maybe consider using some more boxes to highlight main points within your paragraphs... see my info under 'demographic data' for an example of what I mean. Very quick and easy to do. Also, I found this image on WikiCommons that you might be interested in:

File:PET - Human Addiction.jpg

Description of the image: PET brain scans show chemical differences in the brain between addicts and non-addicts. The normal images in the bottom row come from non-addicts; the abnormal images in the top row come from patients with addiction disorders. These PET brain scans show that that addicts have fewer than average dopamine receptors in their brains, so that weaker dopamine signals are sent between cells. I hope that you find this useful :-) KristaLeanne 12:52, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for letting me know how to make links... I haven't used any so far! It's really helpful :-)

Comment by Magnolia - Really well researched and set out - Congratulations

Excellent Chapter - well researched congratulations - great video also - Magnolia28


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It presents a clear, well-written, insightful overview of the origins of addiction and potential solutions, and is very well-supported by well-selected citations. The suggestions that follow are relatively minor.

Theory[edit]

  1. Theory is well covered and well structured. The structure is reinforced in the Intro and Summary.

Research[edit]

  1. Effective use of well-selected, relevant citations.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. There much to like about the down-to-earth and clear writing style.
    2. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned"
    4. Getting comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft helped to improve the chapter - well done.
  2. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of Interwiki links
    2. Some effective image use; perhaps more could be added.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Some more proofreading could be useful - see my edits for examples
  4. APA style
    1. In-text citations were used effectively.
    2. Reference list was in very good APA style; also italicise volume #

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:44, 28 November 2011 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Wow - this is an awesome multimedia presentation - it kept my attention throughout. It covered so much ground, so effectively, focusing in on key points which were very well illustrated through the stories/examples of the characters involved.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Structure and content were very well developed and presented in a highly professional documentary style.

Communication[edit]

  1. Narration was excellent; well-scripted, well-paced, not too much or too little.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Production quality was superb - subtly, yet powerfully scripted, shot, and edited, with additional text were useful.
  2. Link to textbook chapter was provided.
  3. Thanks for licensing under a Creative Commons Attribution license.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:49, 10 December 2011 (UTC)