Talk:Motivation and emotion/Textbook/Motivation/Unconscious motivation
ANYONE KNOW HOW TO ADD A LINK TO YOUTUBE ?????????
- To start with, just add the full website address to the video - an auto-link will be created
- I tried that and it didn't work I checked and rechecked my web address but I can't get it to create an auto link?
What's the video? e.g., here's a link to a youtube video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pXElh_VM0Uc which can be made prettier like this Dog parkour. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:37, 31 October 2010 (UTC)
Thanks for your help and thankyou for puting all my headings in a file box I couldn't figure it out. So a big thankyou for that
Here's some comments and suggestions on the draft so far. The main issue is to remove any plagiarised content or quote and attribute it. Then I would expand the section on contemporary psychodynamic perspectives and make sure that you've incorporated peer-reviewed theory and research references about this topic. Hope this helps. Some more specific suggestions follow:
- Have you consulted the various Motivation and Emotion textbooks in short loan to check what they cover about unconscious motivation?
- Images could be slightly larger.
- I've some examples of how to do links to relevant Wikipedia articles in the initial sections - you may wish to do something similar for other key words. (Improves overall quality of written expression for this format)
- APA style
- It is highly unlikely that you have directly consulted, for example, David Hartley (1749), therefore it shouldn't be a primary citation - it may be a secondary citation.
- e.g., freud -> Freud
- The Introduction could perhaps be improved by identifying some focus questions which are pursued throughout the body and answered in the summary/conclusion. This helps to give a chapter some clear direction.
- The Introduction should also outline what will be covered in the chapter and why.
- The Introduction could benefit perhaps from briefly mentioning motivation more generally and then the idea of unconscious motivation.
- What is tachistoscopic (explain)?
- Good idea to have this section
- Initial half -> make it more prosaic
- Last paragraph -> Good, well done.
- Sigmund Freud's Theories of The Unconscious
- This section seems to be much better written than the previous content. This is sometimes a sign of plagiarism. A web search lead to me  which has a very close match with the text you've presented here as your own work. Such text should either be in quotation marks with the source and page number attributed or it should be removed ASAP. The ideas you want to discuss should be independently written in your own words.
- Check the Freud references - the dates given are probably for the most recent publications, but they are just reprints - APA style would be something like (1937/2010) where 1937 is the original date of publication.
- The Freudian content (once you've rewritten it) is worthwhile, but I'm a bit concerned that you should at least equally be emphasising contemporary psychodynamic understandings about unconcious motivation (e.g. as per Ch14 in Reeve (2009)). So, set a historical context, explain Freudian or psychoanalytic understandings about motivation and then describe the subsequent developments and current state of play in psychodynamic understandings (theory and research) about unconscious motivation. - Basically, expand the section "The Unconscious: Other Theories not Related to Freud" (but perhaps give a different title e.g., Contemporary Psychodynamic Perspectives)
- Rather than your own theory, I'd suggest that it could be stronger to provide your own critical summary of traditional and contemporary psychological theory and research about unconscious motivation. This would be likely to provide a stronger demonstration of your depth of understanding. Having said this, the lack of discussion of Jung in Reeve (2009) is notable and it could well be relevant to include a section on Jungian unconsciousness and motivation.
- Differences Between Conscious And Unconscious Motivations - this could be useful to move up into or near the introduction - i.e., introduce motivations and then distinguish between conscious and unconscious motivations
- Summary/Conclusion - provide a review section to remind the reader about the key points that have been covered.
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