Latest comment: 14 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this a CR-level chapter. It successfully explains the concept of self-actualisation and I particularly liked that it included criticisms and an alternative model, as well as considered some applications and included a quiz. The main areas for improvement are developing focus questions, greater use of in-text citations, spelling and grammar, proofreading, and APA style.
Self actualisation or self-actualisation? (Check consistency)
The chapter could have benefited from developing clear focus questions. Getting comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped with this aspect.
Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Some statements lacked sufficient referencing (e.g., see first paragraph).
A table or list of Maslow's identified characteristics of SA could have been helpful.
Spelling, grammar and proofreading
The chapter would have benefitted from proofreading - see my edits for examples.
Use Australian spelling e.g., actualize -> actualise
Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., ones -> one's
There was unnecessary use of semi-colons
Check capitalisation - some unnecessary capitalisation was evident - see my edits for examples.
excepted -> accepted
APA style
Check comma before page number e.g., (Maslow, 1970 p. 16) -> (Maslow, 1970, p. 16)
Latest comment: 14 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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