Talk:Motivation and emotion/Textbook/Emotion/Music

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Feedback[edit source]

  1. Well done on getting this underway. I've had a quick look over the current content, tweaked a few parts, and made some suggestions below.
  2. Overall, the current draft does rely too heavily on too few references. Here's some suggested references and links you may be interested to follow up -
  3. Good image, but the license for File:Youth-runs-wild-440.jpg hasn't been specified - this image will most likely get deleted because it probably doesn't have a free to use license (otherwise, I imagine that the Youth Runs Wild wikipedia article would use this image.
  4. Different Styles of Music is promising but probably lacks sufficient connection to emotion or referencing. Therefore, perhaps summarise more briefly - and/or add an overall summary - what are the main implications of different types of music and their impacts on emotion?
  5. The relationship between emotion and music - Bridging the gap between Emotion and Music - This is probably the most important section to be expanded - this will be mainly where you are likely to address the two key marking criteria (theory and research) - the other criteria is quality of expression.
  6. Make sure to do a careful copy-edit - I've fixed some typos that I found.
  7. I found this in some of my notes: "Labbe, Schmidt and Babin (2007) found that listening to self-selected music or classical music following exposure to a stressor significantly reduced the negative emotional states and physiological arousal compared to sitting in silence or listening to music chosen by others

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:08, 1 November 2010 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Feedback 2[edit source]

This is shaping up - I've fiddled a bit with a simpler structure - see what you think - change back anything you don't like etc. Hope this helps.

  1. Introduction
    1. Explain the aims, focus questions, and what will be covered in the chapter.
    2. The other content could be shifted possibly into other sections to allow the introduction to be more of an overview.
  2. APA style - check citation style e.g., & should only be used inside brackets and for subsequent citations within a paragraph don't include the year
  3. I put the info about musical styles into a subpage and added a link to this from the What is music section with the suggestion that you offer a brief summary about music styles. I wonder if somewhere later on it might be possible to create a table which shows which styles correspond mostly typically which type of emotions (I'm not sure what's been done in this area).
  4. Check out if you haven't found it already:
    1. - looks like some good ideas and references here.
  5. Remember the marking criteria is Theory 33% and Research 33% so make sure you cover these in as substantial and explicit way as possible - tell the reader in the intro what will be covered and why, then remind in the summary/conclusion what the answers to the focus questions are. The other 33% is written expression, APA style, layout etc.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:18, 5 November 2010 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Chapter feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this would be a good first draft for comment, but as it is it does not reach P-level for a final product. The main areas lacking were the lack of usage of psychological theory about emotion, the need for a more indepth overview of psychological research about music and emotion, and in the quality of written expression, particularly spelling, grammar and proofreading. Copyright permission was also not provided for accompanying images.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Although some music theory is covered and qualities of music are related to emotion in a general sense, there is a notable lack of usage of psychological theory about emotion. There is a little bit about types of music that may facilitate happy or sad emotions, but much more could be explored about this - what about the suggestion that the four different kinds of music produce different emotions? (I'm not sure if this can actually be substantiated, so perhaps the idea should be removed altogether?). What about the suggestion that personality has a role? (e.g., maybe introverts prefer less stimulating music to extraverts in order to achieve optimal arousal?)
  2. The section titled "what is music?" doesn't cover this - it instead argues for the importance of music in human life that different music styles have different emotional affects. Probably rename the section to more accurately reflect the content.
  3. What is a key? What is harmonic violation?(Explain for a music theory novice). Also explain "technically speaking this refers to the shift in authentic cadence from dominant to expectant tonic in harmony, and the motion from approach notes to target notes in melody". This is where links to relevant other wiki material or to a sound file, for example, could be particularly helpful and instructive to the target audience (undergrad psych students).

Research[edit source]

  1. Some promising research was identified, but more depth would have been desirable e.g., "Surprisingly, music has been found to actually be an effective manager for acute pain (Siedliecki & Good, 2006)". Tell us more? e.g., when describing important research findings, try to indicate the size of effects rather than simply whether or not there was an effect or relationship. What kind of music? How long lasting are the effects? etc. In contrast, the Steinbeis study was well described.
  2. It's not clear to me whether major reviews of emotion and music research were identified and cited? Was a comprehensive literature search conducted?

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The written expression was promising in places, but lapsed too often into personal enthusiasm for music (and grand claims about the importance of music), but lacked sufficient supporting argument, evidence of critical thinking, and there were significant problems with spelling, grammar and proofreading which below the standard for P-level for a third year unit. I made some changes (check the editing history), but I recommend getting professional assistance to improve spelling, grammar and proofreading skills (e.g., see Academic Skills).
  2. Learning features consisted of links to youtube which were promising. As with the earlier comments, this could be even stronger by embedding specific examples with the text to illustrate specific theoretical or research points rather than the general "watch this and see how you feel" approach e.g., a piece of music that is likely to induce a sad emotion vs. one that is likely to induce a happy emotion.
  3. The reference list was not presented in APA style.

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Overall[edit source]

Overview[edit source]

  1. This was a minimalistic presentation - a read through of abbreviated chapter text at high pace with basic bullet-point slides.
  2. How about adding music to presentation?
  3. Narration voice
    1. Slow down - it felt in places like you were just trying to get through a script as fast as possible.
    2. Using more variation in tone will add to the interest.
  4. Examples?
  5. Slides were basic text, but readable.
  6. No images?
  7. "They state" - who?

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:29, 14 December 2010 (UTC)Reply[reply]