Talk:Motivation and emotion/Textbook/Emotion/Anxiety

Acknowledgements

I would like to thank Suzy, Sandra, Brigette, Michelle, Leigh, James and Todd for their support in compiling this chapter. Thanks guys :-) - User:Gajah, Dec 2010

Feedback on draft plan

Wow - this is impressive in scope, ambition and strategy. My main concern would be that it that it's probably overly ambitious for the assessment exercise! (It represents a professional quality, however, that is more than worth aspiring to). On the one hand, this may not mean changing much e.g., go for 5 quiz questions rather than 10 etc. On other other hand, it is probably a comment/reminder to focus on the core objectives (agree about defining the purpose - which I see as explaining and summarising psychological theory and research about anxiety as an emotion). Also perhaps consider psycho-evolutionary theory. It occurred to me that perhaps Parts 1 and 2 might be switched e.g., introducing anxiety in the context of a broader understanding of emotion and perhaps other related emotions, then going on to discuss theories and research about anxiety in the next section, followed by or accompanied by the specific example of PTSD. I like the "arousal" opening - I think that should work well - as should the other attention to orienting the reader. The detailed description of what is intended for each section is also excellent. In addition, the "extra features" are excellent - but I would emphasise the other parts first, and these parts second (e.g., multimedia would be excellent, but can also time be consuming to develop). I hope these thoughts help - inspirational stuff and I'm keen to use this as an example plan for others. Let me know if I can anything else. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:31, 21 September 2010 (UTC)

Hey, I was just checking out your topic involving emotion-anxiety. I am doing the motivational aspect. I really like your ideas. PTSD, good choice !! Also if you'd like some ideas on symptoms, treatment or anything like that, nightmares, intrusions etc. I may be of some assistance, I've read alot about that some time back. User - Hamish24

Feedback

1. I've added a feature box for the interview with Sandra - how did you get this into screenr!? (I didn't know that was possible).
2. At this stage I've just a quick look through to wikify a few things on your page - I'll come back later to look in more detail at the content, but I think in general the structure is looking clear, disciplined and educational (esp. the recaps and activities).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:59, 11 November 2010 (UTC)

Feedback

Overall, this chapter is looking pretty solid. The extra resources are excellent and the structure is good. I think Part 1 and 2 could do with some more work since at the moment it mostly consists of somewhat separate one-sentence paragraphs. Mainly, try to explain anxiety as an emotion or in relation to emotion. Otherwise, this is looking like a solid and interesting chapter, with lots of examples and interesting links, side boxes, interactive quizzes etc.

Introduction

1. Maybe move the first paragraph into the previous section (about PTSD)

Objectives

1. Clear; good

Part one

Emotion and Anxiety - Emotion

1. Reference four second duration?
2. Good to see the interlinking with the Ekman and facial expression chapters; however, I'm not sure that this is best focus since Anxiety isn't one of his core emotions. Do any of the core/basic emotion models include Anxiety - why or why not? This could help to give more a lead in to the next section. At least perhaps try to be clear - is an anxiety an emotion? a mood? A bit of both? Is it a secondary emotion?
3. Consider, perhaps, what is the opposite of anxiety

Part one

Emotion and Anxiety - Anxiety

1. OK - anxiety is explained/defined but maybe just help address the previous question and set up the next section
2. Interesting content, but seems to be a series of somewhat disconnected ideas/sentences.

Part two

The Effect of Anxiety on Emotion

1. Interesting content, but seems to be a series of somewhat disconnected ideas/sentences.

Part Three

Post Traumatic Stress Disorder (PTSD)

1. Effects of PTSD on Emotion - Important stuff, because it connects anxiety and emotion.
2. Section Recap - besides military combat, what other situations could cause PTSD?

Activities

1. Activity 1: Maybe tailor to anxiety more specifically (maybe combine with Activity 4)

Glossary

1. Good

References

1. Good

External links

1. Well selected

Answers to quizzes

1. Very good

Style

1. Fantastic use of additional video material
2. Excellent use of sideboxes to highlight key terms and concepts
3. Use sentence casing for image captions
4. Direct quotes - no italics, use double-quotation marks and cite page #s
5. Remove middle % for "(Fernandez-Dols, Carrera, De Mendoza & Oceja, 2007; & Miyamoto, Ellsworth & Uchida, 2010)."
6. Repeated citations within a paragraph do not include the year, e.g., (DSM-IV-TR, 2009) but then (DSM-IV-TR) in the same paragraph.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:56, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

Chapter feedback

This textbook chapter has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see what editing changes I have made whilst reading through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below or continuing to improve the chapter if you wish. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

Overall Overall, this is really interesting and well put together chapter. The readability and interestingness of the chapter is the highlight, with lots of links, examples, images etc. with text presented in a down-to-earth manner. Theory A solid understanding of anxiety is evident, with consideration of basic definition and disorders. I would have liked to see perhaps more in depth consideration of the biological and psychological aspects of anxiety and the connection with arousal, appraisal, stress and coping. The section explaining the effect of anxiety of emotion I saw as the most important - and also the section that probably needs most improvement. It was rather general - it would be good to see, for example, what are the correlations between anxiety and the core emotions? Research The research coverage was relatively light. Whilst references were used, it would be helpful to describe some studies in more detail in terms of their methodology, findings and the implications for theory or applications related to anxiety. Written expression The overall presentation was fantastic - congratulations. Some relatively minor comments follow. Some paragraphs were overly long (e.g., 1st paragraph of emotion). Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. The chapter had a well developed introduction, with clearly identified areas to be covered. Learning features Excellent linking to other textbook chapters. Excellent use of youtube links to further explain content Spelling, grammar and proofreading - for examples, see my edits Spelling: Some errors - e.g., disphoria -> dysphoria Grammar: Some commas were missing Proofreading: Some typos identified APA style Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Use double-quote marks for direct quotes

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:57, 13 December 2010 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overview Overall, this is a well structured, well paced and well presented multimedia recording. Clear slides - but increase font size to aid readability Well paced narrative voice (many presentations were too fast) Effective use of bullet-point animation to highlight current point For each slide/key point, the point is well made without going into excessive detail. Audio is clear Narrative voice could use greater variation in tone. PTSD focus provided a practical example of anxiety's impact on emotion No summary/conclusion? Image attributions? Copyright license? Content Conclusion Audio Video Meta-data Licensing

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:28, 14 December 2010 (UTC)