Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2010/Stress and health

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Chapter feedback

This textbook chapter has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see what editing changes I have made whilst reading through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below or continuing to improve the chapter if you wish. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very solid CR-level chapter. The topic is well covered in an interesting, readable manner. Learning features and relevant images with captions were included. The main areas for improvement were in proofreading, some aspects of clarity of expression, and APA style. Perhaps closer connection between stress, health and emotion could also have been provided.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant physiological and psychological theory about stress and its relation to physical and psychological health are covered, with evidence of critical thinking.
  2. Greater connection to theory about emotion (and emotion and health) would have been desirable. e.g., what connections could be made between this chapter and other chapters?

Research[edit source]

  1. When describing important research findings, try to indicate the size of effects rather than simply whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  2. Why are there different rates of PTSD aren't the world? Why is this relevant?

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The chapter could have benefited from developing clear focus questions. Getting comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped with this aspect.
  2. The case study worked well, particularly being in two parts. It was an example that the textbook audience is likely to be able to relate to.
  3. Wiki-links would be helpful e.g., hypothalamus
  4. What is allostatic load? (explain unfamiliar terms/concepts)
  5. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Check ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
  6. APA style
    1. References were not all in APA style. Formatting (e.g., italics) wasn't applied.
    2. Cite citations in alphabetical order e.g., (Myers, 2007; Marieb & Hoehn, 2007) -> (Marieb & Hoehn, 2007; Myers, 2007)
    3. Do not cite the year for subsequent citations within a paragraph e.g., Smith (2010) but after that in the same paragraph only refer to Smith.
    4. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. (rather than "and colleagues" e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and then in the next paragraph cite Smith et al. (2001).


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid narrated voice with bullet-point slides style presentation.
  2. In the introduction, establish why the topic is important and what will be covered.
  3. The content focuses on stress and health (and does a good job at this), but doesn't relate this much to emotion
  4. Accompanying images facilitated the text/voice.
  5. Use less text per page and larger font.
  6. Good narration voice - expressive
  7. Image attribution
  8. Copyright license?

Communication[edit source]

Production quality[edit source]

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:21, 14 December 2010 (UTC)