Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2010/Sleep and emotion

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Nice to see you are making progress on your TB chapter! I see you have quoted my boy Ekman in your theory. Might I suggest you make his name into a link to my TB page?
Cheers!--MichelleK 00:43, 4 November 2010 (UTC)

Love your work! MichelleK 22:12, 7 November 2010 (UTC)


Chapter feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very solid, well researched and well written chapter.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter demonstrates a very good understanding of relevant theory.
  2. Excellent overview of emotion.
  3. The overview of sleep was somewhat technical and neurological (more explanation or links to explainations of the technical terms could have been helpful). No particularly connnection between REM/NREM sleep and emotion is offered.
  4. The Relationship between Sleep and Emotion - An Overview - Excellent - brings the topics together into clear focus.

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter does an excellent job of focusing on relevant research findings.
  2. Where research findings are discussed it would be helpful to also mention the size of the effects (e.g, amygdala being 3 times more active).
  3. Citation for claims of collective sleep deprivation would be helpful e.g., "suboptimal sleep levels are now considered the norm"

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Overall, the chapter was well written and presented. There was some minor, but regular grammar issues. Effective use was made of highlight boxes. Images were useful adjuncts to the text. Some inter-wiki links were added.
  2. The introduction could have benefited from clearly establishing some focus questions of interest.
  3. The chapter summary was very well written - a rich, but succint summary of the key content.
  4. Some of the feature boxes seemed to just re-quote the text.
  5. Avoid one sentence paragraphs.
  6. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. welbeing -> well-being
    2. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals vs. individual's; also check use of its vs it's; also note Study's -> Studies
    3. Did you mean "volitation" or perhaps "volition"? (regardless, the term could have done with explanation)
  7. APA style
    1. APA was generally very good, particularly for citations.
    2. APA was not used to caption and refer to figures/tables.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

7

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid CR-level presentation. It effectively summarises the chapter, but could have benefitted from slowing down and more expressively concentrating on fewer key points.
  2. The slides and animations were clear.
  3. What is REM/NREM? (Explain)
  4. Audio
    1. Take a bit more pause between slides
    2. Use a bit more expressiveness (the presentation improved in this respect towards the end).
    3. There was sometimes a knocking noise against the microphone
  5. Key findings were useful.

Communication[edit source]

7

Production quality[edit source]

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:34, 13 December 2010 (UTC)