Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2010/Depression and motivation

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Textbook chapter plan feedback[edit source]

  1. This looks like a sound plan of main topics and to have appropriate focus/scope.
  2. This article may be of interest [1] - it identifies amotivation as of 5 manifestations of depression.
  3. The theories look to be well selected. Other theories which may be relevant? Perhaps neurological and perhaps evolutionary (e.g., does depression have an adaptive function - by disengaging) e.g., see [2]
  4. Consider combining section two and three.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:43, 31 October 2010 (UTC)

Chapter feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid to strong chapter.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theories were generally well explained and used as frameworks for understanding the motivational nature of depression. Amotivation is described as a key syptom. There was excellent section on learned helplessness. Appropriate use of SDT is included, along with a range of treatment approaches. The focus on treatment approaches was a strength of the chapter.
    • The chapter could have benefited from a more developed introduction, which specified clear focus questions. As it was, the introduction mostly considered of basic definitional material about Motivation and Depression.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research was reasonably well covered, although not as strongly as theory.
  2. Check the statistics for depression - 6% lifetime incidence sounds too low to me.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The chapter was reasonably easier to read, although in places I found that there was room for improvement in the clarity of expression. e.g., "This has serious consequences for motivation" - what are those consequences?
  2. Good use was made of learning features such as interwiki links (although more could have been added), Tables, Images, feature boxes and quizzes.
  3. Integrate quotes into sentence and paragraph structure rather than inserting them as full sentences e.g., this was inserted but not integrated: "The more dominant the negative cognition schema becomes, the more cognitive distortions occur and the greater the disturbance of effect and depth of depression" (Gilbert, p. 402)."
  4. Bullet-points were probably over-used e.g., I think the summary would have been stronger without bullet-points.
  5. Spelling, grammar and proofreading was very good.
  6. APA style
    1. Tables and Figures were not captioned as per APA style.
    2. Italics were not used in the reference list.
  7. Some of the use of colour I found to be a bit strong - have toned some it back a bit.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

8

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Congratulations, this is an HD-quality presentation.
  2. Clear, expressive speaking voice.
  3. Nice use of a different voice for the quote.
  4. Well paced presentation, with pauses between sentences and slides
  5. Slides were clear and easy to read, although some font size in some slides could be larger.
  6. Animation was effective without being over the top.
  7. The content clearly focused on the topic at hand - depression and motivation.
  8. Accompanying images supported the text.
  9. Image sources were acknowledged.
  10. Perhaps a summary of key-points (take-home messages) would be useful at the end.

Communication[edit source]

8

Production quality[edit source]

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:21, 13 December 2010 (UTC)