Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/ADHD and motivation

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References and suggestions[edit source]

Hi! As someone diagnosed with ADHD this topic automatically took my interest! One area that I think is always a good talking point is how identifying ADHD in men and women is different. Also how their symptoms differ! (Just some food for thought) Definitely, something to note when diagnosing, that women may have different symptoms than men.

Slobodin, O., & Davidovitch, M. (2019). Gender Differences in Objective and Subjective Measures of ADHD Among Clinic-Referred Children. Frontiers in Human Neuroscience, 13. https://doi.org/10.3389/fnhum.2019.00441

‌Crawford, N. S. (2022). ADHD: a women’s issue. Https://Www.apa.org. https://www.apa.org/monitor/feb03/adhd

‌Chronis‐Tuscano, A. (2022). ADHD in girls and women: a call to action – reflections on Hinshaw et al. (2021). Journal of Child Psychology and Psychiatry, 63(4), 497–499. https://doi.org/10.1111/jcpp.13574

‌--U3161584 (discusscontribs) 07:12, 28 August 2022 (UTC)Reply



Hello! I was reading through your chapter and wow that's a lot of really awesome content you have put in. A suggestion I would make is to try and narrow down the scope of your content as it is quite broad and covers a lot of background information regarding ADHD. I think focussing more on the motivational aspect and ADHD's impact on motivation, as well as perhaps discussing how to increase motivation in someone who has ADHD would be beneficial for your chapter. Finding articles to support this would be helpful, as well as providing hyperlinks. Hope this helps! U3216389 (discusscontribs) 01:50, 12 October 2022 (UTC)Reply


Hi I was looking at the presentation of your chapter you have included a lot of good information on the topic. A suggestion I would have is to maybe include some tables and some short quizzes to add to the presentation and engagement of your book chapter :)Hope this helps! U3215103 (5:33PM October 16th 2022) - Social contribution

References[edit source]

Hi, It looks as if you have started gathering information, and you have an extensive symptomatology section. It would be helpful if you had sources to back up what you are saying.

This book would be a good place to look for the basics on physiological psychology and its available for 3 day loans at the UC library: Kalat, J. W. (2019). Biological psychology (13th ed.). Boston, MA, USA: Cengage

U3216256 (discusscontribs) 04:29, 28 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Resource Suggestions[edit source]

Hey,

As someone with ADHD, I love your topic!

I'm particularly interested in what you'll find for environmental influencers of ADHD and motivation.

For me personally, cognitive remediation was a huge part of developing the skills to manage ADHD-related amotivation. As such, I though I would share a couple journal articles discussing the intervention. I hope they help.


Stevenson, C. S., Whitmont, S., Bornholt, L., Livesey, D., & Stevenson, R. J. (2002). A cognitive remediation programme for adults with Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder. The Australian and New Zealand journal of psychiatry, 36(5), 610–616. https://doi.org/10.1046/j.1440-1614.2002.01052.x

Tajik-Parvinchi, D., Wright, L., & Schachar, R. (2014). Cognitive Rehabilitation for Attention Deficit/Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD): Promises and Problems. Journal of the Canadian Academy of Child and Adolescent Psychiatry = Journal de l'Academie canadienne de psychiatrie de l'enfant et de l'adolescent, 23(3), 207–217.

Veloso, A., Vicente, S. G., & Filipe, M. G. (2020). Effectiveness of Cognitive Training for School-Aged Children and Adolescents With Attention Deficit/Hyperactivity Disorder: A Systematic Review. Frontiers in Psychology, 10. https://doi.org/10.3389/fpsyg.2019.02983

Jdebear (discusscontribs) 05:09, 28 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Nice formating of information, really easy to read and enjoyable topic. Thought you might like this article on ASMR as a treatment option for ADHD: Autonomous Sensory Meridian Response as a Treatment for Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder--Zmelmoth02 (discusscontribs) 23:11, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  3. The author name on the list of topics was incorrect - now fixed

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 01 for how)

Headings[edit source]

  1. Thorough, but needs to be more targetted/concentrated towards addressing the topic: "How does ADHD impact on motivation and what can be done about it?" Background info about what ADHD is, what causes it etc. can be sumamrised, with embedded links to re# Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. Otherwise, the chapter risks not providing adequate coverage of the target topic.

Key points[edit source]

  1. As per point above, the plan for this chapter currently seems to address a different question (e.g., "What is ADHD, why causes it, and how can it be treated?"). But the target topic is about the impact of ADHD on motivation and how it can be managed. There is a risk that this could be an excellent chapter about ADHD but not be sufficient as a chapter addressing the target topic.
  1. That issue aside, the key points are well developed.
  2. Good balance of theory and research
  3. There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory, however, strive to balance the content with critical review of relevant research
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  5. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Excellent use of examples/case studies
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies
  9. Cite each reference at least once in the main text.
  10. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year)
  11. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words
  12. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info
  13. Write the chapter using 3rd person perspective, although a case study or feature box could use 1st or 2nd person perspective
  14. Use Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour)
  15. Move references into the References section. Keep citations in the main body.
  16. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well developed
    2. Underway
    3. Under developed
    4. Hasn't been developed
    5. What might the take-home, practical messages be?
    6. In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?
  17. Generally well-written, but I recommend using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression because there are a lot of grammar and spelling errors.

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned
  2. The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. doi formatting - hyperlinks should be active for 1-click access
    2. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Very good
    2. Use bullet-points (as per Tutorial 01)
  2. External links
    1. None included

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Feedback and suggestions[edit source]

Great choice of topic! As someone with a recent diagnosis of ADHD I'm intrigued to see how your chapter develops so I can learn more. Can't wait to read it!

I have found a few interesting articles that may be worth considering when expanding your chapter. For example, Milioni et al. (2017) discuss the impacts of "high-functioning ADHD" in terms of "masking" of executive functioning amongst individuals with higher intellectual efficiency. They suggest this may account for difficulties in obtaining a clinical diagnosis, which I can agree with considering my own lived experience. Keezer et al. (2021) also focuses on this area of research. Very interesting stuff!

References:

Keezer, Leib, S. I., Scimeca, L. M., Smith, J. T., Holbrook, L. R., Sharp, D. W., Jennette, K. J., Ovsiew, G. P., Resch, Z. J., & Soble, J. R. (2021). Masking effect of high IQ on the Rey Auditory Verbal Learning Test in an adult sample with attention deficit/hyperactivity disorder. Applied Neuropsychology. Adult, ahead-of-print(ahead-of-print), 1–9. https://doi.org/10.1080/23279095.2021.1983575

Milioni, Chaim, T. M., Cavallet, M., de Oliveira, N. M., Annes, M., dos Santos, B., Louzã, M., da Silva, M. A., Miguel, C. S., Serpa, M. H., Zanetti, M. V., Busatto, G., & Cunha, P. J. (2017). High IQ May “Mask” the Diagnosis of ADHD by Compensating for Deficits in Executive Functions in Treatment-Naïve Adults With ADHD. Journal of Attention Disorders, 21(6), 455–464. https://doi.org/10.1177/1087054714554933 U3223109 (discusscontribs) 00:44, 11 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

feedback[edit source]

Hey there. Great job on your book chapter looks like there was a lot of time and effort that had been put into completing this. My one suggestion to make the chapter more appealing maybe the use of more images/figures/tables throughout. This may engage the reader more and be appropriate for all kinds of audience when reading your information. U3216563 (discusscontribs) 06:23, 16 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:04, 19 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that makes very good use of psychological theory and research to help address a real-world phenomenon or problem
  2. Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits

Overview[edit source]

  1. Solid Overview
  2. Explains the problem or phenomenon
  3. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image
  4. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter

Theory – Breadth[edit source]

  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  3. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Theory – Depth[edit source]

  1. Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  2. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  3. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Research – Key findings[edit source]

  1. Basic review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful
  4. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  5. Table 1 is overly detailed; summarise

Research – Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Integration[edit source]

  1. Basic integration between theory and research

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Very good summary and conclusion

Written expression – Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
    2. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
      1. Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.[1]
      2. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Check and make correct use of commas
    3. Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min)
    4. Abbreviations
      1. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., etc.)
  4. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are very well captioned
      2. Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
      3. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
      4. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation)
    4. Tables
      1. Use APA style for captions. See example
      2. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1)
    5. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Do not include author first name or initials
      2. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
    6. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[3]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section

Written expression – Learning features[edit source]

  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 2
  5. Excellent use of image(s)
  6. Basic use of table(s)
  7. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  8. Very good use of quiz(zes)
  9. Excellent use of case studies or examples
  10. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Use bullet points per Tutorial 02
  11. Very good use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use bullet points per Tutorial 02
    2. Use sentence casing
    3. Move academic peer-reviewed sources into the References section and cite

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~7 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. The sub-title is narrated. Also narrate the title. This helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. I love the bridge metaphor!
  4. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  6. The presentation makes implied use of relevant psychological research; ideally make more explicit use of research
  7. Consider including citations to support claims
  8. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent/very good/good take-home message(s)
  2. A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary
  3. The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question)
  4. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
  5. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question
  6. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
  7. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  6. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  7. Audio recording quality was excellent
  8. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is very well produced

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter
  5. A link from the book chapter is provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

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