Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Survivor guilt

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Images[edit source]

I noticed that there are no images yet, and on a quick search realised this would be a difficult on for you. However, perhaps searching for your survivors may help add a few. Here is a link to Wiki Commons that may help if you are struggling to find any.--U3167879 (discusscontribs) 21:53, 28 August 2021 (UTC)Reply

Journal article[edit source]

Hi there. I found your topic very interesting and started to look into survivors guilt. I found a critical review article that would fit into the section on Holocaust survivors. The article is titled Survivor guilt: A critical review from the lens of the Holocaust, and the link is: https://doi.org/10.1177/0269758016637480. Hope this helps you in completing your book chapter! --U3127020 (discusscontribs) 04:21, 14 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hi, I found your points really interesting and am interested to learn more when you complete your book chapter. I came across this book when I was doing some research on survivor guilt for my internship and thought it may be of use to you. You can access the full copy online through the UC Library Search. It is also on Google Books. Hope this helps! 'Trauma and Recovery: The Aftermath of Violence--From Domestic Abuse to Political Terror' by J. Herman in 2015. U3187813 (discusscontribs) 04:33, 15 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Comments[edit source]

Hi, I really find your topic interesting and noticed you are going to expand on survivors of the Holocaust. Eddie Jaku, a Holocaust survivor, has recently passed away and I would recommend having a look at some resources surrounding him. He was said to be the happiest man on earth and his experiences as a survivor seem quite unique and oppose some research suggesting all survivors live unhappy lives. Here is a link to a news article with an overview of his life: https://www.bbc.com/news/world-australia-58883318 Good luck! Rani u3190257

Hi! great topic and you have alot of interesting content, but I noticed that the in-text citations and reference list were light. It may be a bit late now, but here is a link: https://www.canberra.edu.au/library that has a wide range of resources and easily formatted citation generator --U3198955 (discusscontribs) 10:55, 17 October 2021 (UTC)U3198955Reply

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:14, 15 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  3. On re-reading the original sub-title (Why do victims of trauma experience survivor guilt?) I think perhaps a better sub-title may be: Why do some survivors of trauma experience guilt? So, I've changed it. It's exactly the same topic, but hopefully slightly better wording.

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development.
  2. Consider using more descriptive headings (rather than 1 or 2 words)

by expanding the structure

  1. Consider adding sub-headings for each of the major headings between Overview and Conclusion
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview:
    1. I think too much core content is planned for this section. A lot of it could be moved into subsequent sections.
    2. Instead, provide a description of the problem and what will be covered
    3. Add focus questions
    4. Add an image
    5. Add an example or case study
  2. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words
  3. What is survivor guilt - targetted section, makes sense
  4. Examples of focus questions and/or headings that might be useful: What is the prevalence of survivor guilt? How long does it last? What are its impacts? Who is most vulnerable? How can it be treated? How can it be prevented?
  5. The mind - too broad/vague - focus
  6. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  7. Theories - explain why these are the two most relevant theories. Are there are other theories of note? Perhaps also consider emotion theory about guilt more generally, and how this applies in the instance of survivor guilt.
  8. Survivors - some case studies would be useful and this section provides some examples that could be used. However, a major section dedicated to major events like this isn't needed. But the more that psychological theory can be applied to these examples and/or relevant research has been conducted, the more useful they could be.
  9. There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research
  10. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts.
  11. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. under developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption formatting has been adjusted. Suggest adding "survivor guilt" for context. Needs page number for quote. Even better, write your own caption to explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting
    4. separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:14, 15 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

suggestion[edit source]

Hey! This is such a sad topic, and really hits home for me as I had a family friend lose his daughter in a car accident that he was driving :( It is really interesting in a morbid kind of way Anyway I have an interesting article that I think you should give a read, as far as i can see you haven't referenced it yet, https://www.ccnursing.theclinics.com/article/S0899-5885(06)00059-1/fulltext --U3202984 (discusscontribs) 12:16, 15 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also include the title.
  2. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest .
  3. A context for the topic is established.
  4. The importance of this topic is explained.
  5. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.

Content[edit source]

  1. The presentation addresses the topic.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation is creatively and well structured.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s).

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  4. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. The presentation is very polished.
  6. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  7. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides.
  3. The use of animation is creative and engaging.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  6. The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time.
  7. The presentation is very well produced.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from VYOND but this is not explicitly stated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:42, 20 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. The Overview is underdeveloped.
  2. Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail.
  3. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter.
  4. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.
  3. Build more strongly on other guilt-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Guilt).

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Reasonably good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Some relevant research is reviewed.
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal.
  3. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research

Integration[edit source]

  1. There is basic integration between theory and research.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Basic summary.
  2. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest.
  3. Address the focus questions.
  4. Add practical, take-home message(s).

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
    2. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
    3. Consider providing more descriptive headings (e.g., consider using a brief description of the key point for the section titled "*"?).
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
  4. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words.
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are captioned in a basic way.
      2. Figure captions use the correct format.
      3. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    4. Citations use correct APA style.

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
  2. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s).
  5. No use of table(s).
  6. Good use of feature box(es).
  7. Basic use of quiz(zes).
  8. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  9. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  10. Very good use of external links in the "External links" section.
  11. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~2 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:18, 23 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Source[edit source]

Incredibly intriguing topic!

Here is a source discussing self-blame following childhood sexual abuse which I think would fit in excellently into this topic !

Filipas, H. H., & Ullman, S. E. (2006). Child sexual abuse, coping responses, self-blame, posttraumatic stress disorder, and adult sexual revictimization. Journal of Interpersonal Violence, 21(5), 652-672. https://doi.org/10.1177/0886260506286879

Loved reading this :) U3210431 (discusscontribs) 06:42, 11 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Concerns have been raised about the "fair use" of an image on this page.[edit source]

See discussion at File talk:Charles-darwin.jpg Guy vandegrift (discusscontribs) 19:38, 21 December 2023 (UTC)Reply