Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Triune brain theory and emotion

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Hi! u3175502 here, i came across this youtube video and thought that it might be of use for your book chapter research! - The Triune Brain (Youtube video). I am really excited to see what you come up with in your book chapter. (The preceding unsigned comment was added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]]) )

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:18, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Title has been added to be consistent with the book table of contents Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Excellent - used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Summarised with no link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Section headings Extensive 2-level heading structure - overall, looks good. However, may be too ambitious - be prepared to cut down. What is the most important? What is the least important? e.g., I'm not sure that the religion section is required or necessarily advantageous. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points At least some key point development for most sections Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion is missing (the most important section): what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Image Excellent How does the image relate to TBT? - explain References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:18, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, but insufficient chapter. Theory is reasonably well described, although it is surprising that some very basic communications like an image showing the locations of each part of brain aren't provided. Some interesting research and possible applications are included. The chapter lacks sufficient critical perspective (e.g., [1]). The chapter relies on surprisingly few peer-reviewed sources. The chapter could be improved by developing a Conclusion with take-home messages related to each focus question. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory There is some useful description of theory, but also some basic explanations are lacking (e.g., what is the evolutionary model/assumptions and where are each of the relevant brain structures location)? There is too much emphasis on historical origins. Focus more on contemporary understandings. What are the criticisms? What are the alternative perspectives? Some brief critique is offered towards the end. Some useful historical case studies are integrated. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of some relevant research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[2] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Conclusion with clearer take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Minimal use of image(s). No use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Grammar Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'; 1940's vs 1940s).[3]. Exclamation marks are overused. Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard (e.g., 1940s but also 90s are used - be consistent with formatting). Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:35, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter content not withstanding, the content is well selected and explained. also largely apply to this section. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes little use of research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of Prezi. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent greater intonation and articulation enhances listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided, but it doesn't specific which Creative Commons license applies. A link to the book chapter is provided but it is not clickable.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:52, 20 November 2020 (UTC)