Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Exergaming and fitness motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:40, 29 August 2019 (UTC)

@Jtneill Thank you for that! I have fixed them up now so they should all be in sentence case.--U3144248 (discuss • contribs) 18:07, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Zwift

Have you come across Zwift? Might be an interesting example. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:40, 29 August 2019 (UTC)

@Jtneill I had a look at the Zwift site that you mentioned and it looks very interesting. I would love to explore it a even more in the book chapter!--U3144248 (discuss • contribs) 18:07, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Summarised with direct links to evidence. Section headings Promising 2-level heading structure, but probably over detailed due to too much preliminary content. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Expand content about the relationships between EG and fitness motivation; reduce preceding content. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. References Excellent Resources Excellent External links look like they should be references. Instead, provide other resources, such as videos.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:56, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

The Quizzes

I really like your topic! I almost considered doing this one myself before settling on mine. I noticed a bit of a glitch(?) with the quizzes though. The first one worked just fine, but the second and third ones didn't. The second one had the same question and answers as quiz number 1, but when I answered it, it switched to a different question and set of answers. As for the third quiz, all of the questions were the same as the first quiz. But other than that, I really liked reading your page! --Demimimimi (discuss • contribs) 11:51, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are very well selected, described, and their relevance to the topic explained. Perhaps also consider more targetted theories such as Uses and gratifications theory. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful (e.g., https://scholar.google.com/scholar?hl=en&as_sdt=0,5&q=exergaming+systematic+review). Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is well written. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. See earlier comments about heading casing. Otherwise, the chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links and embedded links to other book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of images, tables, feature boxes, and quizzes. Good use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Check and correct use of that vs. who. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Use APA style to cite figures. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. See new doi format. Social contribution ~19 simple, useful, logged social contributions with direct links to evidence; mostly contributed in the day before chapters due.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:52, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon tools. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. A Conclusion slide is presented with take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was excellent. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Image sources are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:00, 18 November 2019 (UTC)