Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Dissonance

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Hey Dani!! Great page. Youve not only covered the topic in depth but each sub topic as well. Great work! Is there any studies on cognitive dissonance you could include? Id say thats about the only thing that could make it better :) Keep up the good work Courtney.reis 06:56, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

I'm working on the application part at the moment - ie. how to use it. This is where the studies will fit in. Thanks for the comment! 121.45.221.187 00:06, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

G'day. This is an excellent looking chapter on what is a truly interesting topic. Great idea... kind of wish I'd thought of it myself. Regards U895075 02:15, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter looks great. I was impressed that you were able to effectively link motivation with cognitive dissonance. I found the type to be Very small in figure 1, but I'm not sure if you can make it larger. Anyway, great work Crazydaisy 09:09, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

This chapter is looking really good, i like the reference to diet and eating cake (i may have done that a time or two). I like that you have made this more personable and less like a research paper EamesA 23:55, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey, chapter looks good. Just one thinking probably should change your references so they 'hang'. I really like the think spots idea :). Mlac 12:36, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for pointing that out! Danielle.d 12:12, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Comment by Magnolia - liked the Think Spots and the Quiz - really well laid out presentation - interesting content - well done

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Overall Overall, This is a solid, neat chapter. It addresses a clearly defined, self-help issue and relates it well to motivation, but also emotion. It is easy to read, uses examples and includes some useful learning features, including images, diagrams and a quiz. The main areas for improvement could be grammar (over-use of semi-colons) and referencing of primary sources (overly heavy reliance on Reeve (2009). Theory Theory behind cognitive dissonance is well covered, including work of several theorists including Festinger. Heavy citation of textbook (e.g., 1st paragraph) rather than peer-reviewed, primary sources Research Research about cognitive dissonance and motivation is reviewed effectively, with several key studies highlighted. Were older primary sources (e.g., 1956) consulted - or should these be secondary citations? When describing important research findings, try to indicate the size of effects rather than simply whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The chapter exhibited a disciplined focus on an underlying question motivational self-help question and retained this throughout. Some talk page comments appear to have helped to develop the chapter. Paragraphs were generally an appropriate length. The summary should probably be written in paragraph style. Having said this, these bullet-points do provide an effective summary of the take-home points in the chapter - perhaps top and tail the points with a regular sentence or two. Learning features The quiz questions and presentation were excellent. Wiki-links: Greater use of interwiki linking is recommended. No external links section was provided. Spelling, grammar and proofreading Overuse of semi-colons where commas should be used instead APA style Generally, this is good, although the reference list needs further editing to be in full APA style. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and then in the next paragraph cite Smith et al. (2001). et al -> et al. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:39, 24 November 2011 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a first-class presentation. It does all the key aspects of the exercise really well. Structure and content Well organised and paced. Clever structure, with think-spots, leading to clear take-home messages An excellent, basic understanding of the motivational power of dissonance is presented Bike riding example worked well Your own example idea worked well - perhaps needs more time to let someone think of an example - and/or perhaps give several examples up front Communication Voice and visuals are clear and well-paced. Clear text on slides Clear audio Perhaps pause a little more between slides Think spots were very effective Production quality Effective, simple, large text, high contrast slides Background images worked well Fantastic to see source of images as Wiki Commons Congratulations on using a CC-by-A license

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:34, 9 December 2011 (UTC)