Template:MEBF/2017

Instructions: This is a marking and feedback template for the book chapter exercise for the motivation and emotion unit. This template is designed to be transcluded on a chapter talk page.

Simple example

See also detailed example

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Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Detailed example

Example use of the template which includes some commonly provided feedback comments:

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# Overall, this chapter...
# Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world problem.
# Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
# For additional feedback, see [ these copyedits].
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# Theories are well described and explained.
# Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# There is too much general theoretical material about emotion. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic.
# The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
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# Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
# Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
# Some statements are unreferenced - see the {{fact}} tags 
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# Written expression
## The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
## The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
## Write for an international, not just Australian audience. [https://tradingeconomics.com/australia/population Australians make up only 0.33% of the world human population].
## Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
## Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
## Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made.
## Some sentences are overly long (e.g., *).
## Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the {{explain}} tags
## Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
## Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
## Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
## Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
## Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter.
## Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
# Layout
## The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
## Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
## Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections.
## See earlier comments about [[#Heading casing|heading casing]].
# Learning features
## [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|Interwiki links]] are well used.
## Adding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
## Use in-text [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]], rather than external links.
## Basic use of images.
## Basic use of tables.
## Basic use of quizzes.
## Basic use of case studies.
# Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
## Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the {{spelling}} tags).
## The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the {{grammar}} tags).
## More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
## Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
## Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
## Check and correct use of commas.
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=grammar+that+vs+who&oq=grammar+that+vs+who&aqs=chrome..69i57j0l5.5843j0j7&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8 that vs. who].
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=affect+vs.+effect+grammar&oq=affect+vs.+effect+grammar&aqs=chrome..69i57j0l5.5132j0j7&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8 affect vs. effect].
# APA style
## Use APA style for Figure captions.
## Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
## Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
## Direct quotes need page numbers.
## Citations
### In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
### When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
### A full stop is needed after et al.
### Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
### A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors.
### Check and correct use of [http://research.moreheadstate.edu/c.php?g=107001&p=695202 citations for sources with six or more authors].
## References are not in full APA style e.g.,
### Check and correct capitalisation.
### Check and correct italicisation.
### Add spaces between author initials.
### See [http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html new doi format].
### Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.
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Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this chapter... Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world problem. For additional feedback, see [ these copyedits]. Theory Theories are well described and explained. There is too much general theoretical material about emotion. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic. Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. Research Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Some statements are unreferenced - see the tags Written expression Written expression The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Write for an international, not just Australian audience. Australians make up only 0.33% of the world human population. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made. Some sentences are overly long (e.g., *). Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the tags. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. Layout The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing Learning features Interwiki links are well used. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. Basic use of images. Basic use of tables. Basic use of quizzes. Basic use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Check and correct use of commas. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. APA style Use APA style for Figure captions. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001). A full stop is needed after et al. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors. Check and correct use of citations for sources with six or more authors. References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and correct capitalisation. Check and correct italicisation. Add spaces between author initials. See new doi format. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.