Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Adoption and emotion

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See also[edit]

Hi, ive noticed that you have put in links to book chapters from previous years which is a really good idea! When I went to click through it said that the pages dont exsit. I have edited your page so now they successfully link to the previous book chapters, good luck AGH BMW (discusscontribs) 11:15, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Emotion Section[edit]

Hey, great read! I just read through and edited one of the parts in the emotion section, starting with the quote on emotion so that it all flows a bit better and isn't a few short sentences.

References[edit]

Hey, interesting topic. Was a great read! I just put your journal articles into italics so they are in accordance with APA formatting. Good luck with it all! --U3083978 (discusscontribs) 20:39, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Test yourself[edit]

Hi, your chapter is coming along very nicely, I did notice at the bottom you had a title 'test yourself' im assuming you were going to put a quiz in there so in case you are stuck ive put one in. Its basic and only two questions but you can add more. + indicates the correct answer and - indicates a wrong answer. Hope this helps and good luck AGH BMW (discusscontribs) 04:32, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:15, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

a little bit of statistics[edit]

Hi, I like your chapter. It is structured around adoption and emotion quite well. Here are some comments and suggestions.

1. adoption theory: Was Freud's family romance an adoption theory? what predictions can it generate? It is related to adoption, but does not feel like an adoption theory.

2. Maybe you could in the overview, gives us some statistics about adopted children, a little of history will be good too. Also, briefly talk about common reasons for adopting other people's kids or giving away own kids for adoption?

3. A few decades ago, a lot of korean kids were adopted by Americans after some war. Similarly Australia had a big wave of kids coming from Britain 50 years ago or something. One of them can make a really powerful case study. Also, you can see from social, historical contexts, adoption can involve a lot of things. --Xlc (discusscontribs) 01:37, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables[edit]

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:54, 23 October 2014 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonable chapter, however it appears to contain plagiarised text.
  2. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit]

  1. Coverage of theory was quite good.
  2. There is probably too much emphasis on celebrities as these case studies aren't connected to theory and research. It is also particularly problematic that at least some of this text is plagiarised.

Research[edit]

  1. Some useful coverage of research is provided; more detail about the key studies would be preferable.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter is over the maximum word count.
    2. The Overview and Conclusion don't mention any relevant theory.
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Some text appears to be plagiarised and should be removed or paraphrased (e.g., "A birth parent’s feeling that she was pressured into placing her child for adoption against her will" and "Bill Clinton was born to a widowed mother and was sent to live with his grandparents as a child. He is only the second president in U.S. history to have been adopted (Gerald Ford is the other).")
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Learning features
    1. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links; more interwiki links should be added.
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise)
  5. Grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct the use of commas (e.g., "Sigmund Freud, had a significant influence on modern adoption theory and practice." -> "Sigmund Freud had a significant influence on modern adoption theory and practice."
  6. APA style
    1. See earlier comments about adding APA style captions to tables and figures.
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:50, 8 December 2014 (UTC)