Talk:Motivation and emotion/Textbook/Emotion/Facial expression

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Chapter feedback

This textbook chapter has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see what editing changes I have made whilst reading through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below or continuing to improve the chapter if you wish. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a solid, interesting chapter about facial expression of emotions.

Theory[edit]

  1. Key theories are well covered and explained.
  2. Useful summary of Darwin's principles, but I didn't understand the explanation of "opposing states are associated with opposing expressions"

Research[edit]

  1. Relevant research is reasonably well covered.
  2. Note that Theories can't be proven - they can only be disproven.

Written expression[edit]

  1. The chapter structure worked well.
  2. The clarity of written expression was Pass-level; check history for suggested redrafting to improve clarity.
  3. Several sentences were too long. For example, where you've used a comma could sometimes instead be a place to put a full-stop. See my editing changes for some examples.
  4. Well done on creating, uploading and correctly licensing these images
  5. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. There were numerous errors; for examples, check the corrections I made in editing the page
    2. Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesized -> hypothesised
    3. Comma usage was often incorrect (see my edits)
    4. Check consistency of formatting e.g., for Expression-feeling Link
  6. APA style
    1. Check APA style for captioning of Figures and Tables (not "Diagram")
    2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. Mostly citation is well done, however this isn't acceptable "Wikipedia outlines" without citation - use primary sources for core referencing.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:22, 5 December 2010 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

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Overall[edit]

  1. The presentation was well-structured.
  2. Excellent focus on theories.
  3. Volume was excellent.
  4. Speaking voice was very clear, with good tonal variation, and easy to listen to, but slow down more between sentences.
  5. Slides were very text-based, but the font was readable. However, it's hard to listen to your voice and read so much text (this was true for the early slides, but this improved through the presentation).
  6. Excellent slide on main muscles of the face Smiley.svg
  7. Maybe summarise key take-away messages?
  8. Excellent conclusion.
  9. Well done including references.
  10. No acknowledgement of source of images?
  11. Well done on publishing to youtube.

Structure and content[edit]

Communication[edit]

Production quality[edit]

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:25, 14 December 2010 (UTC)