Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/Eudaimonic well-being

Feedback on plan

Well done on getting your plan onto the wiki page. My initial thoughts are that there is a wide-ranging list of topics. Many are relevant, but there are a lot of topics and most are not necessary. Make sure to focus the chapter around the focus question (see title) and book purpose (practical self-improvement based on psychological science). Basically, explain what EW is to the reader and how it differs from, and is similar to, happiness. Then explain how EW can be fostered and developed. This is the single main purpose of the chapter. Some history is helpful - but only pick out key, interesting parts. Examples would be helpful. Remember, in terms of meeting the marking criteria, important considerations are 30% theory (is EW clearly explained and are key relevant theories used to explain EW more deeply?) and 30% research (what does research indicate about EW?. These could be presented as separate sections or integrated into other sections.

In summary, then, I'd suggest starting with an overview of the topic/problem, and a conclusion section containing the take-home recommendations. Focus the body around the key focus question, utilising a critical review of EW theory and research. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:39, 23 October 2011 (UTC)

Hey there! Great plan. I can see you are going to have lots of fantastic information once your chapter goes up. I have a good picture of what your chapter will be like already, good stuff! Courtney.reis 08:35, 26 October 2011 (UTC) 58.169.42.43 11:39, 31 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Susann, Thanks for your comments on my page (Gambling). Yeh, I'm aware of the different sub-groups in older age gamblers, and other research which suggests that women in the older group take up gambling faster than men, and stuff - problem is word count in the Chapter page (I'm on thin ice there). :) I have the option to include more info in the Glossary, but again, that means more references, which impacts on the Chapter page. There's a lot that I could have said, but like everyone else, we can only say so much. Same deal with Environmental Mastery - I was actually going to say in the Chapter that self control was a bit of wishful thinking when it comes to genuinely Pathological Gambling but.... :)AlexMC 22:40, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Suzanne, Near the top of your page you are looking for a Ref for well-being, motivation vitality does this help?

http://web.ebscohost.com.ezproxy1.canberra.edu.au/ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?vid=13&hid=108&sid=560da629-72c3-459f-881d-d0f14f1c8e3e%40sessionmgr114 AlexMC 05:36, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi Susann, thanks for your comments on my 'mindfulness' page. In going through my research again last night, I came across an article that I thought might be useful for your topic- not sure if you have already spotted it so I thought I would let you know anyway. It's called: LIVING WELL: A SELF-DETERMINATION THEORY PERSPECTIVE ON EUDAIMONIA, Ryan, Huta and Deci, Journal of Happiness Studies (2008) 9:139–170, DOI 10.1007/s10902-006-9023-4. I love the layout of your page- I think it's looking great. Such an interesting topic. There seems to be a bit of overlap between our topics and I have found both fascinating. Cheers U3067255 03:47, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

Susann - this is a great chapter and also should be published in magazines - well done - great information and presentation - Magnolia

Heading casing

FYI, the Wikiversity convention is lower case headings. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:37, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

Fixed up your heading - hope this is ok. If you don't like, just delete.

Hi - noticed you said on my comments page, you were still trying to work out how to do a heading like mine. So I've slotted one in using your colours (couldn't get corners squared off though). Even has blank spaces for image files if you want to use. If not, just delete the additions I've made or revert to the earlier version. :) Jeanette 05:21, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a good job of summarising a lot of EWB-related theory, with reference to accmpanying research. However, the conceptual argument was somewhat difficult to follow because of long sentences and long paragraphs. This chapter would need considerable rewriting to achieve an accessible style for a self-help book. Theory Good overall coverage of relevant theory. However, I struggled to identify a central narrative/argument. The subtitle is about why EWB is more important than happiness. SWB compared to EWB is the focus for much of the chapter. Attention is turned to happiness relatively late in the chapter. However, I was still confused by the overall conceptual argument e.g., "In sum, the factors contributing to sustainable happiness give further support to the huge amount of evidence happiness is developed and sustained through EWB." What are the few key points in the overall narrative? Use these to structure the chapter. The summary is quite good - and indicates that there is a clear response to the question. The structure however didn't seem to fully-reflect a simple, synthesised response. Research Some of the theory coverage could be balanced out by more research studies and/or examples. There was perhaps an over-emphasis on comparing and contrasting SWB and EWB. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The chapter is quite text-dense. Shorter paragraphs and shorter sentences could help to make it easier to read. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Some sentences were overly long. They could sometimes be split into sentences instead e.g., "Carol Ryff’s 1989 six dimensional model of PWB was developed to strengthen the conceptual framework of EWB and measure psychological functioning, it has also been found by multiple investigations to the best fitting model of well-being (Ryff & Singer, 2008)." Avoid overusing abbreviations - this can make it difficult for a reader to follow. The chapter could have benefited from developing clear focus questions relating to the self-help book theme. Well done on getting comments on a chapter plan. However, there is no correspondence with the commentators to show how this feedback was used to improve the chapter. Perhaps comments on an earlier draft could also have helped to improve the chapter. Learning features Several useful tables were used Some interwiki links were used; more could be added Some images were included; useful captions could be added Spelling, grammar and proofreading Numerous typos were evident; more proofreading needed. APA style In-text citations were well used. Reference list is in very good APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:43, 28 November 2011 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a simple, effective multimedia overview of the Eudaimonia chapter. Structure and content Perhaps establish self-help focus questions in the general introduction A summary with take-home messages could make effective use of the last 20-30 seconds Communication Audio narration was reasonably effective Maybe use more examples to bring the topic to life? Production quality Overall, production quality was basic but effective Some text seemed to clash with the background image (making it difficult to read) Audio quality was fair (there were some regular pulses/missing bits of audio and there was some white noise) Well done on using Wiki Commons images Consider releasing the presentation under a Creative Commons licene

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:02, 10 December 2011 (UTC)