Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/Diet, weight loss, and emotion

Comments

Hi, seems like you have made a good start here and I look forward to reading more on your topic. Jessica.h 07:53, 25 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi, This is such a big topic these days. It's all over T.V and in the printed press. There seems to be such a broad amount of diets available, so much I find it all a bit confusing. I'm looking forward to your finished chapter! Goodluck :) Jemmasanderson 00:06, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

Heya! Your chapter is looking pretty pretty interesting so far. I think we will have alot of common themes, particularly relating to the fact that restricting food intake causes people to actually gain weight and that emotion has a lot to do with failing in a diet. Would you be happy to link our chapters together? http://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/Overeating Cheers Claremw 06:13, 3 November 2011 (UTC)

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Subheadings

Great read flows well. Not sure if you want to keep your subheadings breif so its easier to follow? Miz.mira 06:13, 5 November 2011 (UTC)

References

Check the APA style for the Reference list. Sincerely, James. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:03, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

Draft comments

I've had a quick look at your draft. Some comments:

1. There is a lovely balance between theory/research and practical self-help focus - this is excellent. So, in further drafting I would simply continue to improve/refine what you have, plus address APA of references and check the edit history - I made some 'wikifications' and left some notes e.g., in the External links section

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:15, 6 November 2011 (UTC)

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I have indented your reference list. As per your request. Miz.mira 07:31, 6 November 2011 (UTC) Good quiz - really interesting information - well done - Magnolia

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Overall Overall comments This chapter provides some great self-help advice based on a firm foundation of research and theory. Theory Theory comments Nice to see some intraorganismic mechanisms and discussion of emotional eating. More discussion could be devoted to extraorganismic mechanisms, and the glucostatic and lipostatic hypotheses. As this topic is mostly about the role of emotion in eating, the definition of emotion could be expanded to include components as defined in the textbook, short-lived subjective-physiological-functional-expressive phenomena. Research Research comments Keeping a food journal, and changing the environment to avoid eating cues, regulating emotion through other means (e.g., exercise) are great suggestions and on track with the self-help focus of the topic. Some statements need clarification: “The key is to avoid making bad choices so that emotional eating does not become the only strategy for dealing with emotions.” Need more citations to back up statements. Some assertions require further explanation: What are the ‘psychological reasons’ for difficulties experienced in subsequent diets? Perhaps explain why dieting and being hungry go together through changing leptin and ghrelin levels. Interesting finding that choice of food type is related to mood/emotion. Written expression Written expression comments Some incorrect word usage/spelling (e.g., extreme extend->extent; con- cerned, achiev- ing) Requires further proofreading (e.g., “see the big picture and reaching (->reach) their personal goals”, “make a plan diet plan”). Great use of a quiz and images as learning features. Try to avoid prepositions as the end of sentences (e.g., into, of). In main text, eg., should be spelt out in full. Avoid contractions in formal APA style (e.g., doesn't, you've, there's, it’s). Typographical errors, some sentences lack full stops, others have too many (“strugglesMessage”). Numbers at the beginning of sentences should be expressed in words. The reference list is not in APA style.

Rfoster 07:01, 28 November 2011 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a simple, effective, bullet-point style, narrated audio presentation. Structure and content A very good, balanced understanding of the topic is evident; this is presented in a personable style Not too detailed (good) Lots of tips and practical suggestions offered (excellent) The presentation was well-organised Communication Excellent speaking voice; clear and well-placed - accent is fine to follow and actually makes it more interesting; good elocution More images could be used Production quality Audio quality is excellent Transition between slide 2 and 3? (had to manually click through) - seemed also on Slide 4 - bullet-points came up without audio? (Seemed to be missing some recorded audio) Title text was difficult to read References difficult to read Link to book chapter? License and attribution for images used? Thanks for the licensing the presentation using Creative Commons Attribution

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:36, 10 December 2011 (UTC)