Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Stretch goals

Topic development feedback

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Title The title casing has been corrected The sub-title casing and wording have been corrected User page Created; minimal Introduce self Consider linking to your professional profiles Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Headings Underdeveloped Key points Some development, but minimalistic. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words Use bullet-points and numbered lists (per Tutorial 1) Use APA style 7th edition for citations Overview - Consider adding/expanding: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Expand theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Use APA style citations Conclusion (the most important section): under developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented. Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider decreasing image size References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order capitalisation italicisation Resources None provided in standard sections See also now added External links now added

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:39, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:26, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.

Title The wording and/or capitalisation of the title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. The wording and/or capitalisation of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. Remove user name – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Under-developed, 1-level heading structure – develop further, using a 2-level structure for the larger section(s) Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Overview Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Promising focus questions Focus questions should use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Is this genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries otherwise it violates academic integrity. Start off by explaining what stretch goals are (i.e., as per focus question 1) Remove rampant overcapitalisation (e.g., Stretch -> stretch) Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies). Abbreviate - keep it punchy. Or perhaps break up the case study into parts that best illustrate different key points in the text based on theory and research. Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also Not developed User page Not created – see Tutorial 02 Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:26, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter Much of it reads like poorly prompted and minimal rewritten genAI content submitted without acknowledgement. If so, this is a violation of academic integrity. The main areas for potential improvement are closer reading of the best psychological peer-reviewed literature on this topic, especially research, and the academic quality of written expression I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in many places Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand This chapter "beats around the bush" For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Underdeveloped Engage reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Language is flowery/vague Explain the psychological problem or phenomenon in more detail Basic focus questions Theory Define stretch goals Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic Much of the content is about general goal setting principles with generic, vague case studies Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations Replace the multiple cookie-cutter examples with a smaller number or more insightful examples which illustrate the best psychological knowledge about stretch goals Research Insufficient review of relevant research Identify the key studies Provide more detail about key studies Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Conclusion Vague, flowery Poor summary and conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills. Likely overreliance on unacknowledged use of genAI. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet points into full sentences and paragraphs Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout Underdeveloped heading structure Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. References are not in full APA style. For example: Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Basic use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. No use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use sentence casing Very good of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Social contribution No logged social contributions. For more info, see making and summarising social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:45, 4 November 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it does not adequately address the topic. The topic is stretch goals, but the presentation was about shared goals. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with an incorrect title (shared goal) and no sub-title is displayed Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section This presentation does not adequately address the topic A fundamental confusion is evident between stretch and shared goals with a mixture of both throughout The presentation addresses the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic The presentation makes only very rudimentary use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is poor There is reflected light burn and the slides are difficult to view because the screen is being externally videoed Consider showing the full screen of the slides with an inset webcam using screencasting The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read (or present full screen) The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:44, 7 November 2023 (UTC)