Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Multiple selves theory, motivation, and emotion

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:00, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.

Title The title is correctly worded Formatting (capitalisation) corrected The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Remove citations from headings Remove "A brief overview of motivation and emotion" - embed this content elsewhere Remove key point headings (embed content) Remove case study headings (embed content) Replace with more meaningful and descriptive headings and sub-headings Add a scenario in a feature box (with an image) at the start to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Check and correct grammatical errors (e.g., opening sentence) Do not capitalise theories (APA style) - avoid overcapitalisation (e.g., Motivation -> motivation) Promising start on focus questions, but the plan could be improved by further developing these questions Use single- rather than double-barrelled focus questions Overview No comment Key points Very limited development Figure A relevant figure is presented Use 3rd person perspective Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature A case study is planned, but in insufficient detail No wiki links, quiz, table etc. Minimally sufficient Remove Reeve - use primary sources Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation dois needed page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) References No comment Resources See also Good Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages Not developed External links Excellent User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Two out of three types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:00, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and copyedits Overview Basic Provide a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Theory Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic Overly focused on general theoretical background; instead summarise, link to related resources (i.e., other book chapters and/oor Wikipedia articles), and concentrate on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research Overly reliant on Džinović (2022) More detail about key studies would be ideal Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2] Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional bold) See earlier comments about heading casing Provide more descriptive headings Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[4] Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[5] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations use correct APA style Very limited reference list References are not in full APA style. For example: Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Minimal use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Minimal use of image(s) No use of table(s) Minimal use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:46, 2 November 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because of the lack of conclusion and licensing information. The rest of the presentation is basic but sufficient. The presentation is under the maximum time limit, so there was room for further development of the ideas Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Consider speaking more loudly to make it easier for the viewer to hear (I needed near maximum volume) Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using shorter sentences. This will help to introduce natural pauses at full-stops. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked explicit synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked explicit synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:56, 9 November 2023 (UTC)