Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Artificial emotion

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:09, 27 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Overly complicated 4-level structure – simplify by removing the 3rd and 4th level. Expand the second level. Messy heading structure – needs work Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Definition(s) is a pedestrian heading. Incorporate definition material into the Overview and/or subsequent sections with embedded inter-wiki link(s) to further information. Remove quiz as a heading; embed quiz question(s) within the most relevant sections Overview Simplify/abbreviate - move detail into subsequent sections Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest Description of the problem/topic should be brief and evocative. Keep this section user-friendly. Move detail into subsequent section. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended No. 3 is not a question Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., ethics). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Surprisingly, no mention of affective computing? (e.g., see Lecture 08) Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, table(s) etc. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also OK Use sentence casing Include "(Book chapter, year)" after links to other motivation and emotion book chapters on Wikiversity Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Excellent User page Good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:09, 27 September 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Good Provide a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Focus questions are promising Align the questions more closely with the sub-title Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained about a contemporary, applied topic Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Research Excellent review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are mostly referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout The chapter is poorly structured Remove sub-headings from the Overview (I've fixed) See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2] Abbreviations Only use abbreviations such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc. inside parentheses, otherwise spell out Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use serial commas[3]. See explanatory video (1 min) Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Tables Expand caption Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Learning features Good to very good use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Very good use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:50, 4 November 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Consider including key citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes creative use of animated drawing The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated, but it is unclear - "Copyright Notice: All illustrations and font are hand drawn/written" is ruled through? Super-impressive visualisations. I'm curious to know what editing software you used. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:15, 11 November 2023 (UTC)