Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Mindfulness and creativity

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:35, 5 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Used effectively Description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by focusing and expanding the structure Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) Check and correct grammar e.g., How are mindfulness and creativity interlink? Reduce emphasis on preliminary sections describing mindfulness and creativity separately; expand the key section which is currently titled "How are mindfulness and creativity interlink?" Key points Insufficient development of key points for each section, with relevant citations References are listed but not cited Use bullet points (see Tutorial 02) For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Overview Not developed Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is not presented and cited References For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) None Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic Use either APA style or wiki referencing style, but not both. Currently, a mixture of referencing styles is used. Resources See also Not developed External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:35, 5 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Some key ways this presentation could be improved: insufficient use of psychological research about this topic lacks an adequate conclusion audio quality is poor The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has an opening scenario to hook audience interest Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Check and correct grammar. Who is "we"? (only one creator is acknowledged?) Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Remove YouTube pop-up preview box The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well paced Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech The audio communication is hesitant — could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was poor. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is partially matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

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Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter The main area for potential improvement is to more directly address the topic (i.e., expand the review of the best available academic, peer-reviewed theory and research about the relationship between mindfulness and creativity) and provide less about mindfulness and creativity as separate, stand-alone concepts) I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic Overly focused on definitions; summarise and move to the more substantive aspects of theory. The chapter starts to briefly directly address the topic in the section titled "How is mindfulness beneficial to creativity?" Build more strongly on other creativity-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Creativity) Theory – Depth Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Key findings Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text but don't enhance meaning Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Do not include author first name or initials Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section References are not in full APA style. For example: Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression – Learning features Basic use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Basic use of case studies or examples No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:37, 20 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter resubmission feedback

1. These changes were reviewed:
   1. ~1200 words were added
   2. The Overview has been improved
   3. The breadth and depth of theory has been improved a small-to-moderate amount
   4. The breadth and depth of research has been improved a moderate-to-large amount
   5. Quiz questions have been added
   6. The Conclusion was changed but with limited improvement to the focus on the mindfulness-creativity relationship

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:56, 28 November 2022 (UTC)