Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Mindful self-care

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The capitalisation of the title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. The wording and capitalisation of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings Under-developed, 1-level heading structure – develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the larger section(s) The original sub-title outlines three questions. Consider using these as part of the level 1 heading structure I don't think measurement is a particularly important topic for addressing this question. Consider removing or reducing and incorporating as a sub-heading in another section Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Basic development of key points for most sections, with some relevant citations The Overview can be briefer. Consider moving a lot of this content into subsequent sections. Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing Use interwiki linking style and rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link

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Suggestions for this chapter

Hello! I have found a good article on mindful self-care among palliative care providers and some techniques on how to improve wellness which may be helpful Good luck! https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC8917778/ U3216389 (discuss • contribs) 06:55, 13 October 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:15, 16 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter that provides lots of useful information, but lacks sufficient grounding in academic, peer-reviewed sources, particularly research. The quality of written expression is problematic due to grammatical issues. More examples would be helpful. But the practical explanation and advice is excellent. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overview Explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Reasonably clear focus question(s). Ideally, provide open-ended questions; I've reworded the third question to better align with the sub-title Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Very good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists are used to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced, but there is an overreliance on non-academic sources Integration Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research Conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Many aspects are very good or excellent, but there is a lack o of professionalism in terms of spelling and grammar. Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2] "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[3] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Check and make correct use of commas [4] Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., etc.) Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are very well captioned Figure captions use the correct format Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Select up to a maximum of three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point) Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname Move non-academic sources to the external links section References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[5] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Minimal use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Citations and links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section Very good use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes). The questions have been removed because they were too absolute (lacked subtlety/nuance). Ideally, the questions would relate to mindful self-care more generally. No use of case studies; limited use of examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Good use of external links in the "External links" section Include sources in parentheses Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:15, 16 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also narrate. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A context for the topic is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes implied use of relevant psychological research; ideally make more explicit use of research The presentation includes citations to support claims Include citations to support claims The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Basic intonation Audio recording quality was very good Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:23, 21 November 2022 (UTC)