Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Menstrual cycle mood disorders

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:57, 30 September 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly formatted The capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents The wording of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Not created – see Tutorial 01 Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – looking ahead to the book chapter submission see how to earn marks for social contribution Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Under-developed, mostly 1-level heading structure – develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the larger section(s) Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Some basic development of key points for some sections Lack of citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study The question is not so much about "treatment" but about "management", although treatment can be part of management Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A figure is not presented References None Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic Resources Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:57, 30 September 2022 (UTC)

Comment

Hey there,

What an incredible topic! I am really looking forward to reading your final piece. For now, I would love to drop some sources that might be fitting:

If you would like to incorporate sleep disturbance I found this great source discussing how the hormonal and mood shifts can have an impact on sleep for women, making women much more prone to insomnia: https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S2352250X19301605?casa_token=CEItEhURNmIAAAAA:sUMRG8bQjkrmSwRl-Eb5rtbNZi8HYp8lm4lxVQL9e7Uh7XNLKbqH8192bw2usWVk1jR2pAuxa-jg U3210431 (discuss • contribs) 10:37, 6 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it: doesn't address the topic (see sub-title) using academic peer-reviewed sources is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content The presentation somewhat addresses the topic Go straight to MCMDs (not enough time to talk much about MDs) Over focus on describing the disorder as opposed to the causes and what can be done about it The presentation is reasonably well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Include citations to academic sources to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced The narrated content isn't sufficient matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content isn't well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access Licensing Image sources are communicated, however this presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:58, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter, with lots of interesting/useful information The main way it could be improved is by being more focuses on the sub-title (i.e., causes and management of MCMDs). Management should include non-clinical approaches. The other main area for improvement is greater use of the best available psychology theory and research about this topic based on academic, peer-reviewed sources Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Explains the problem or phenomenon Avoid repetition of subsequent material Too long. Move detailed content in subsequent sections. The purpose of the Overview is to briefly explain the topic, engage reader interest, and establish focus questions for the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory – Breadth Reasonably good coverage of relevant theory There is too much general material describing what MCMDs are, history, etc. and a lack of sufficiently specific focus on the causes and management of MCMDs (see the sub-title). Also consider non-clinical management. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Reasonably good is provided about relevant theory(ies) The main area for improvement is tailoring the content to more specifically address the causes and management of MCMDs No use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information One good use of an example to illustrate theoretical concepts. Consider using more. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Key findings Reasonably good of relevant research Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research – Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Doesn't cover causes; does cover management Reminds the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2] Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.[3] Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') [4] Use serial commas[5] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Abbreviations Only use abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.) inside parentheses Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Check and correct placement of full-stops Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section References use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Present the references in alphabetical order by surname of first author "Retrieved from" is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Check and correct use of capitalisation[6] Check and correct use of italicisation Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Good use of learning features# No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Problematic use of image(s). Uploaded images were falsely claimed as own work, so I've nominated them for deletion. Basic use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Good use of quiz(zes) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being focused on the sub-title. Very good use of case studies or examples No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Be more selective Rename links per Tutorial 02 Include sources in parentheses Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 18 November 2022 (UTC)