Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Fairness and emotion

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings Basic, heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the 2-level structure Consider removing the 3rd level of heading and expanding the 2nd level of headings Check and correct grammatical correctness Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Promising development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem focus questions an image an example or case study Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., what is emotion?). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Promising balance of theory and research Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A relevant figure is not presented and cited References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting - make hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:07, 4 October 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:55, 6 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image Underdeveloped focus question(s) Poor quality of written expression Theory – Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Basic overview of relevant research Research – Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration There is basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional bold) See earlier comments about heading casing Provide more descriptive headings Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/One/No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Good use of quiz(zes) Good use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:55, 6 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because ... The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes There is insufficient summary of research Licensing details are insufficient Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has an opening scenario to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation is well/poorly structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic (but too indepth) use of one example (ultimatum game) The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Check and correct grammar Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement Audio recording quality was very good Video Overall, visual display quality is ebasic The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access Licensing This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:40, 12 November 2022 (UTC)