Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Academic help-seeking

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:20, 6 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Suggestions for this chapter[edit source]

Hello! I love what you have done with the book chapter so far regarding AHS. I would like to suggest using Case Study boxes, Example boxes, and adding in some more interactive features to engage the audience more and make it a more dynamic learning experience. U3216389 (discusscontribs) 00:22, 12 October 2022 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter (ideally, use an internal link, as per Tutorial 02)

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence
  2. The summary is vague
  3. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Promising, logical 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the 2nd-level structure

Key points[edit source]

  1. Basic development of key points, with relevant citations
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a brief, evocative description of the problem
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  3. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed

Figure[edit source]

  1. A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned
  2. Caption should include Figure X. ...
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. doi formatting
    3. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
    2. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
    3. Not developed
  2. External links
    1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:20, 6 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing and images[edit source]

Hi,

Your book chapter is progressing nicely. Just a few minor suggestions, perhaps consider adding more images to engage the audience and adding a label in the description in italics (e.g. Figure 1., Figure 2.). Some of the heading casings need another look (e.g. 'Barriers to Academic Help Seeking' should become 'Barriers to academic help-seeking'). Overall, great work! U3203545 (discusscontribs) 06:02, 14 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Comments[edit source]

Hi, the chapter looks nice and the idea is great yet I think in the overview, it good to define the topic and address the questions to giving directions to the reader. Here's some information I think is useful for you.

Cheng, K.-H., Liang, J.-C., & Tsai, C.-C. (2013). University students’ online academic help seeking: The role of self-regulation and information commitments. The Internet and Higher Education, 16, 70–77. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.iheduc.2012.02.002

Karabenick, S. A., & Gonida, E. N. (2017). Academic help seeking as a self-regulated learning strategy: Current issues, future directions. In Handbook of self-regulation of learning and performance (pp. 421-433). Routledge.

Jingru shao 0906 (discusscontribs) 13:45, 14 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem
  2. Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits

Overview[edit source]

  1. The Overview is underdeveloped
  2. Explains the problem or phenomenon
  3. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest
  4. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter

Theory – Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)

Theory – Depth[edit source]

  1. Very good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies)
  2. Key citations are well used
  3. Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  4. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts

Research – Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed
  2. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful

Research – Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  2. Claims are referenced

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are well summarised, with take-home messages

Written expression – Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good
    2. Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored") [1][2]
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[3] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min)
    2. Figures
      1. Figures are very well captioned
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    3. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
      2. Include hyperlinked dois

Written expression – Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is good
  2. Minimal use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Basic use of feature box(es)
  7. No use of quiz(zes)
  8. Very good use of case studies or examples. Consider using more culturally diverse names.
  9. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Also include Wikipedia links.
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~10 logged, minor, mostly end-of-semester social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. Use a numbered list

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:27, 3 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good\ presentation

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. This introduction engages audience interest
  3. A context for the topic is established
  4. Focus questions are presented

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research
  6. Include citations
  7. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is not presented
  2. The how can it be fostered slide serves as the Conclusion

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced
  4. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  6. The narration is well polished
  7. Audio recording quality was excellent

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time
  5. The visual communication could be improved by including more relevant images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check and correct casing.
  2. A written description of the presentation is not provided
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:18, 9 November 2022 (UTC)Reply