Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Cognitive behaviour therapy for emotional abuse

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Hi, Very interesting, and sad topic. I was curious about the breaking the cycle part, and the sorts of relationships children who suffered emotional abuse have as adults. Would be interesting to see if they tend to have partners who were also emotionally abused, and so both reinforce each other. I'm wondering if it applies to friends too and the people one surrounds themselves with generally. Great book chapter and I hope you do well. --Julesrc12 (discuss • contribs) 06:50, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Wording and capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Wording and capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Author details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Logical structure 2-level structure. Be wary, though, of the risk of providing too much background information, and too little on the key section which is "Using cognitive behaviour therapy to treat emotional abuse". Key points Overview - Consider: Greater focus on the topic rather than the background (separate) concepts of CBT and EA (i.e., focus questions 3 and 4 are much more important than 1 and 2). adding a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Citations lacking. Changes links to academic articles to citations and include them in References. Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population Key points are reasonably well developed for most sections, with relevant citations Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption uses APA style Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Australia could be used as a case study, but ideally target an international audience. Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Currently there do not appear to be any references about CBT for EA - that should be the focus. Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:38, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:21, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The main areas for potential improvement are: More focus on reviewing relevant research Some minor grammar improvements For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed, readable Overview. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. There is a practical emphasis on therapeutic techniques used. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). If anything, the depth could be abbreviated to allow more room for reviewing relevant research. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Add practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comments about heading casing. Grammar Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Increase image sizes to make them easier to read. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Very good use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:21, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research. Citations for the research would be helpful. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. Audio communication is well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is hesitant in a couple of places - could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was very good. In a couple of places is some minor buffeting (microphone may be too close). Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides, with text and images. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:41, 19 November 2021 (UTC)

Good afternoon James, Thank you very much for this feedback. It is thorough and very helpful for future multimedia presentations. I just wondered if the grades should have been released yet for this assignment, noting above it says marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. I have not received the mark in CANVAS, nor have I received an overall grade for the unit. I wonder if this may have something to do with it. Any guidance you can provide on when the grade for this assignment and unit may be released would be greatly appreciated. Thank you again for a fantastic semester! Christie (U3179143) 158.40.7.10 (discuss) 02:31, 23 November 2021 (UTC)