Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/COVID-19 and mental health

From Wikiversity
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback
Jump to navigation Jump to search

Capitalisation[edit source]

FYI, APA style and wiki style don't capitalise the names of disorders. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:47, 11 August 2021 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing[edit source]

Hi Sarahwill2211. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:02, 7 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Helpful articles[edit source]

Hello! I love the clear layout of your chapter so far! I am also writing a book chapter on COVID-19 and emotion and I came across these articles which I thought might be helpful for your chapter! The first is a cross cultural article about the psychosocial impacts of COVID-19 and the mental health of LGBT+ young adults, and the second is a study looking at the psychological correlates of COVID-19 across 59 countries. Enjoy! :)

https://doi-org.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/10.1080/00918369.2020.1868186

https://pubmed.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/33128795/

--u3197931 (discusscontribs) 14:56, 28 August 2021 (UTC)D.mandziyReply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created - minimal, but sufficient
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence.
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Use a numbered list.

Headings[edit source]

  1. A useful, initial structure here, but it would benefit from further development. A 2-level structure makes sense, but the 2nd level structure needs further development.
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  3. It could be useful to briefly summarise COVID-19 impacts on specific mental health disorders, however mental health is a broader topic than specific disorders, so suggest that this chapter steer away from using disorders as the major structuring device. I think it is probably more useful and meaningful to consider how COVID-19 may be impacting on depression, anxiety etc. in the whole population (rather than focusing on the clinical population).
  4. Examining how C19 has impact mental health in specific populations (e.g., essential workers) is also a good idea. Perhaps consider children, the elderly etc. As with the disorders, provide an overview rather than go too far done the rabbit holes of specific populations.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview - Consider:
    1. Clarifying the description of the problem e.g., what is it about C19 that may have impacts on MH (e.g., the disease, fear/worry about the disease, restrictions) - this could form a focus question
    2. Explaining what will be covered
    3. Adding focus questions
    4. Adding an image
    5. Adding an example or case study
  2. Treatment - note that there are pros and cons here - e.g., C19 has accelerated accessibility of MH support through greater use of telehealth.
  3. I'm doubtful that the suggested theoretical frameworks are the most relevant to this topic. Take a closer look at published work on this topic and use that as a guide.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Be open-minded - e.g., also consider, are there potential MH upside benefits? e.g., more time at home, less travel time, more time with family, development of psychological resilience etc.
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. well developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Suggest including links instead about C19 and MH

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:50, 6 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

What's COVID done to the world's mental health?[edit source]

@Sarahwill2211: ABC's radio national coronacast addressed this topic yesterday: What's COVID done to the world's mental health? -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:10, 15 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. This chapter is over the maximum word count.
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Longish Overview. Could be abbreviated to help bring the chapter within the maximum word count.
  2. Consider developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter.
  3. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theory is reasonably well explained.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Sometimes there is a lack of sufficient citation.
  3. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is reasonably well integrated.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Well summarised.
  2. Add practical, take-home messages.

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good.
    2. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. massive) in science-based communication.
    3. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  3. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min).
    2. Abbreviations
      1. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
  5. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
      2. Figures are very well captioned.
    4. Improve consistency of formatting.

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is good.
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s).
  5. No use of table(s).
  6. Basic use of feature box(es).
  7. No use of quiz(zes).
  8. Good use of case studies or examples.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. 1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:02, 7 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes.

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  3. Consider expanding unpacking the sub-title into more specific focus questions that lead to specific take-away messages.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic.
  3. This presentation doesn't really focus on peer-reviewed psychological theory and evidence about COVID-19 effects on mental health. There are already many studies about this and these needed to be reviewed and synthesised. Instead the presentation makes speculative use of some general motivational frameworks.
  4. The presentation lacks sufficient structure - more specific focus questions could help.
  5. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory.
  6. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. What exactly have been the known mental health impacts (and why?). Include citations for key studies.
  7. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit.

Audio[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio.
  2. Audio recording quality was good/poor. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard/mouse clicks audible). Consider using an external microphone.
  3. As per the content comments, the narrated content isn't well matched to the target topic.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is basic.
  2. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides.
  3. The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to be reasonably readable.
  5. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read.
  6. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  7. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  8. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools.
  9. Hide the annotation tools.
  10. The presentation is poorly produced and lacks the polish that comes with practice.
  11. As per the content comments, the visual content isn't well matched to the target topic.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data. Why are different versions of the CC-by-A license used? There's no good reason I can think of for using 1.0.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:55, 19 November 2021 (UTC)Reply