Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Autism and emotion perception through faces and biological motion

Heading casing

Hi Anna u3200574. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:03, 27 August 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Promising 3-level heading structure - could benefit from further development - concentrate on Section 4 - it will be the most important in terms of address the topic. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Overview: Excellent intro to this section Consider adding an image Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Excellent use of examples/case studies. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Write using 3rd person perspective. Use British/Australian spelling e.g., recognizing -> recognising Expand content about motion perception Conclusion (the most important section): promising in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented. Caption should be formatted as Figure X. ... Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:07, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Article

Hi there! Very interesting topic you have here and I can tell a lot of time and effort has gone into your book chapter so far. I was having a look and came across this article which might be of interest to you: https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0010027717302809 it is called Decreased reward value of biological motion among individuals with autistic traits I hope you find it interesting and useful. Keep up the hard work! --U3202023 (discuss • contribs) 22:50, 6 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Build more strongly on other autism-related chapters (e.g., by incorporating embedded links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Autism). The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate, balanced depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Solid summary. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. (e.g., Autism -> autism). Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Figures are very well captioned. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Format bullet-points in Table 1 per Tutorial 1. Social contribution ~13 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:20, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Overview The opening slides present a different title and sub-title to the book chapter. The presentation should be on the same topic and use the same title and sub-title for consistency and to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic reasonably well, but there is some drift from the original topic. For example, there is no mention of biological motion. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research. Also consider using the findings of key studies such as https://doi.org/10.1186/s13229-019-0299-8 The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Jack's story may have worked better if it followed the Overview, to help engage interest and establish the context with a practical scenario. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. At home practices offer some practical steps. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). Audio The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was OK. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., rather loud keyboard clicks are audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is good. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it readable. The amount of text presented per slide makes it pretty good for reading and listening at the same time. But perhaps the text could be abbreviated on some slides. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams in a basic way. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data An abbreviated title is used for the name of presentation. Use the correct title and an abbreviated version of the official sub-title to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from Prezi but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:14, 19 November 2021 (UTC)

1. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist.