Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Performance feedback

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Excellent Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. The structure can still be developed and improved - see some suggestions in the next section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Maybe consider the pros and cons of performance feedback. Theory Consider intrinsic and extrinsic motivation - this is probably more relevant than Maslow's hierarchy of needs Consider performance versus mastery goals and feedback Cognitive evaluation theory is important/relevant Leadership styles could be useful Research Make sure to integrate research evidence along with theory Case studies/examples Promising use of case studies/examples Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. does not use APA style. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:11, 14 September 2020 (UTC)

APA style for citations

@U3178984: This is a minor suggestion about APA style for citations. Add a space before using a citation in brackets. For example, "... learned(Hattie & Timperley, 2007)" should be "... learned (Hattie & Timperley, 2007)". Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:51, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

Draft feedback

@U3178984: I've had a quick skim through this impressive-looking chapter. A few tips/suggestions:

• Consider linking the first mentions of key concepts to relevant Wikipedia pages or related book chapter topics. Wiki links were covered in Tutorial 2.
• Consider using Australian/British spelling - e.g., behaviour (Australian/British) vs. behavior (US); also analyse vs. analyze.
• There are some grammar and spelling errors. Consider inviting peers to help e.g., by posting the chapter on the UCLearn discussion forum. This will help to improve the chapter and give an opportunity for others to make social contributions.
• The hyperlinks in the reference list should be active (i.e., clickable)

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:20, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Social Contributions

Hi, well done on your book chapter, there is a lot of very interesting relevant information regarding your topic. You have repeated "Feedback is one of the most powerful influences" twice right after each other, may I suggest that you change one of the sentences so they aren't repeated. May I also suggest that you change some sentences to bold italics or add something special to your page like a table or some sub headings to make it look more interesting and make viewers "want to read" your book chapter. --U3190523 (discuss • contribs) 07:01, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:59, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. Theory is very good. Research is relatively weak. The quality of written expression is not of professional standard. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected and described. It wasn't clear how cognitive evaluation theory is related to performance feedback. Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Very good use of quiz(zes). Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~24 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence. Note that APA style italicises journal article titles and book titles.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:59, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes basic use of research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:23, 20 November 2020 (UTC)