Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Materialism and well-being

Heading casing

Hi U3197375. FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing). For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:14, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

Additional resources

Hi, I think this looks like a really interesting topic and had a look at some resources that may be useful for your chapter:

Elphinstone, B., & Critchley, C. (2016). Does the way you think and look at the world contribute to being materialistic? Epistemic style, metaphysics, and their influence on materialism and wellbeing. Personality and Individual Differences, 97, 67–75. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.paid.2016.03.004

Kasser, T., Cohn, S., Kanner, A., & Ryan, R. (2007). Some Costs of American Corporate Capitalism: A Psychological Exploration of Value and Goal Conflicts. Psychological Inquiry, 18(1), 1–22. https://doi.org/10.1080/10478400701386579

Happy writing :) --Shayley Woodgate (discuss • contribs) 21:31, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Title and sub-title have been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created Minimal, but sufficient About me Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Section headings Breakdown "Main theories" into more specific content Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 1) Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words. Some limited coverage of theory Little to no coverage of research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Overview - Consider adding: an example or case study. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion What might the take-home, practical messages be? Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption Love it! uses APA style. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links None presented

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:13, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter due to: A lack of sufficient usage of the most relevant psychological theory (there was an overreliance on historical and philosophical material) A lack of sufficient review and citation of relevant psychology research (many claims were made, but they tended to be vague and did not demonstrate a close reading of the best available psychological research on the topic) The quality of written expression was problematic and below professional standard. Many statements were vague and difficult to understand. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of psychological theory. There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., historical and philosophical information about materialism). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question: "What is the relationship between materialism and well-being? ). I'm not sure why the chapter diverts into such an elaborate discussion of "realism" but it is insufficiently related to the topic (the sub-title question). Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of psychological research. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard. Much of the writing is unnecessarily convoluted. Consider ways of simplifying the written expression to make it more accessible to a wider audience. This is the essence of science communication. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning. Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Learning features Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1 (e.g., for the See also section). Some use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles, but mostly to philosphical/historical information rather than to more relevant psychological constructs. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project and connect the chapter more strongly to psychological theory and research. Very basic use of image(s). Figure 2 was falsely claimed as the author's own work and likely violates Gallup/WSJ copyright. It has been requested for deletion. No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Very basic use of quiz(zes). No correct answer is indicated for the quiz question. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Century -> century; Philosophy -> philosophy etc.). APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Direct quotes need page numbers. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:02, 26 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little but the selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic. Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes poor use of research. The graph is poorly interpreted - it clearly shows that incomes are associated with a greater % of happiness and less unhappiness. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio, supplemented with some images. Well paced. The audio communication is hesitant - could benefit from further practice. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The video is basically produced using simple tools. The use of inset webcam made some slides difficult to interpret (e.g., the graph). From 2:06 to 2:47, a low resolution image is displayed, without any other visual information. Hide the slide navigation tools. The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. Audio recording quality was good. Visual display quality was good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:18, 26 November 2020 (UTC)