Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Criminal empathy

Suggested article

Hey, really looking forward to learning more about Criminal Sympathy through your chapter. I did a bit of research as I was going to choose this book chapter starting, this article could be helpful: <https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/full/10.1080/01924036.2018.1543129?casa_token=9ZdS7zVMlWMAAAAA%3A8U4DfPpd9oJShxpfoOY2JAVD9Ir_zQ0xJzfzwM2wX8__DNQeGlvkHUkBeMs6pLxZ0hIgD6hIQNtX0A> --U3170318 (discuss • contribs) 09:02, 25 August 2020 (UTC)

hi, here's a useful journal on juror empathy that investigated how people of the same race and ethnicity will empathise with people who are similar Linder, D. (1995). Juror Empathy and Race. Tennessee Law Review, 63. doi: http://law2.umkc.edu/faculty/projects/ftrials/juryseminar/JurorEmpathy.htmlOwenUC (discuss • contribs) 06:19, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Possible subheading suggestion

Hi, really interesting topic you have chosen! Something that may be interesting to touch on is if criminals can fake empathy or sympathy to receive a more lenient sentence, or if they can fake certain emotions to produce levels of empathy or sympathy (in favour of themselves) in others?--U3187486 (discuss • contribs) 09:31, 26 August 2020 (UTC)

Suggested Article

Hey, Really interested in the topic of your chapter, can't wait to see the finished product. I found this article that might be of use to you, on how different offences trigger different levels of empathy, hope it helps. https://link.springer.com/article/10.1023/A:1020615807663 --U3160493 (discuss • contribs) 08:16, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

Suggested article

Hi i did my placement at Goulburn Correctional Centre and got some great resources. I recommend the Wiley International Handbook of Correctional Psychology (Devon et., al 2019) if you wanted to do some further reading. --U3202324 (discuss • contribs) 09:53, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Subtitles

Hi,

Your chapter is coming along well! I was going to suggest potentially separating the 3 main facets into subtitles in that section? Really excited to read this when you're done!

--U3190244 (discuss • contribs) 23:13, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

Hey, Chapter is looking good, i would suggest having one overview and put the focus questions at the bottom of the overview. i would also suggest briefly introducing the sections for 'social identity theory' and 'the affect of group membership on empathy' --Laurenpeel (discuss • contribs) 06:50, 8 September 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:19, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent Social contribution Excellent Section headings 2 Overviews? Under-developed, 2-level heading structure Theory-strong; less clear about research Tailor chapter more clearly towards criminal empathy Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclus, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Overview - Consider adding: an image. an example or case study. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Lack of theory and research. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption and citing of figure does not use APA style. References OK. For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:19, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Cultural differences, minority groups, and crime severity/popularity

Hey! Your chapter is looking great so far, and I had a couple of ideas for you if you were interested :)

• Is it worth investigating this effect in collectivist cultures vs individualistic cultures? I recall reading somewhere that Japan and similar cultures lean to a more integrative approach towards offenders, whereas individualistic cultures often reject this mentality. (Reintegrative Shaming and Juvenile Delinquency in Japan, Sakiyama et al., 2011)

• Minority groups are an interesting topic to consider -- think of white school shooters in America who are often described as 'unwell' and are excused of their behaviour, as opposed to the response to the BLM protests, with online discourse considering people participating in marches as bad as, or worse than, criminals.

• Maybe have a look at how the severity of the crime (i.e, petty theft compared to murder, or even murder under the defence of necessity compared to serial killing), and how this impacts empathy. Another interesting consideration is the popularity of the crime -- I can't think of any specific research articles, but I'm reminded of how many people almost fetishise or lust over Jeffrey Dahmer, Ted Bundy, etc., and often don't see why there's a problem with that or what they did.

Hope this helps!

--U3190229 (discuss • contribs) 09:09, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

Evolutionary theories of empathy

Hi, your topic is super interesting. I've found a good journal which talks about the evolution of empathy and why it's important! May be useful for your research. https://psycnet.apa.org/record/2016-34516-002 U3176522 (discuss • contribs) 01:53, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Headings

Hi there! The chapter looks super interesting and well researched. Could I suggest referring back to the guidelines on the amount of headings needed? Or even considered breaking your information up into sub-headings to make it flow a little better. Good luck --U3190522 (discuss • contribs) 07:57, 18 October 2020 (UTC)U3190522

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem, particularly given the lack of research in the area. The Overview is good, but probably could be strengthened by being shortened and shifting some of the detail into subsequent sections. The Conclusion is excellent. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. There perhaps an overemphasis on racial perceptions, particularly early on, but as the chapter develops, a broader perspective emerges, offering a more balanced overview. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK. Layout The chapter uses a simple, 2-level structure that could be further developed. Learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. Excellent use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Basic use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Ideally, the questions would be more focused on the key take-home messages. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Black -> black). (Amendment: Black is correct for race per https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/bias-free-language/racial-ethnic-minorities#:~:text=Racial%20and%20ethnic%20groups%20are,Hispanic%2C%E2%80%9D%20and%20so%20on.) APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Inconsistent formatting of page numbers. Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:34, 26 November 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. There is too much content, although it would fit if a briefer conclusion was offered. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes good use of theory. The presentation makes some use of research. A critical perspective is evident. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. What are the take-home messages? Communication The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read, but the presentation could be improved by presenting less text on some slides. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The video is basically produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was OK, but note that audio levels varied between slides. Visual display quality was basic. Image copyright status is provided. Also include links to the images sources. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:46, 26 November 2020 (UTC)