Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Theory of constructed emotion

Headings

Hi, you have a really interesting topic! I thought I'd see how it was progressing.

I noticed that all of the words in your headings started with capitalised letters. Instead of having "Constructed Emotions", it should be "Constructed emotions". This is the case for all of your headings. I didn't want to edit your page, but I wanted to let you know that it's something you should change. James left a note on my page letting me know, so I thought I'd pass that along to you too. Keep up the good work! Kaylah-3163515 (discuss • contribs) 01:49, 10 September 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:21, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Sub-title has been added Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created with minimal description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence Section headings Under-developed 2-level heading structure Key points None presented Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References References should be cited. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Use internal link to Wikipedia or Wikiversity External links None

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:21, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Useful reference

Found a really interesting reference on this topic in my own research as we have similar topics, check out the article 'What emotions really are (in the theory of constructed emotions)' by Jeremy Pober.http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=0&sid=8dbf1afc-0874-4659-8234-70e7551d4047%40sessionmgr103&bdata=#AN=131753990&db=hlh

Hope this helps with your chapter!! --U3173738 (discuss • contribs) 06:47, 16 October 2019 (UTC) U3173738

Italics in referencing

Hi, to get italics in your referencing, use two commas at the start and finish of the section you want to be in italics, rather than quotation marks (means pressing the button twice instead of pressing shift and the quotation button). Hope that makes sense!! Also see this link for more info:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Tutorial/Formatting --U3173738 (discuss • contribs) 04:01, 20 October 2019 (UTC)U3173738

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that successfully explains a psychological theory and its application. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theory is described reasonably well. However, clearer description would be ideal (e.g., no mention of the "emotion paradox"?) Consider including less theoretical explanation and more practical examples or case studies. Research Some relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory; more would be ideal. A critical perspective is evidence; what other studies should be conducted? Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. See earlier comments about heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. Almost no use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Why no link to Theory of constructed emotion? (some external links are provided in See also). No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of images. Correct Figure 2 caption to reflect gender. No use of tables. No use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. No use of case studies. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). Proofreading Check and fix capitalisation (some unnecessary, some missing but needed). APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use capitalise "See"). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. A semicolon is needed between two citations in parentheses. Do not include author initials. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of page numbers. Remove date of access. Social contribution ~5 minor, logged, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:17, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good, basic presentation. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. A Conclusion slide is presented but recommendations are quite general - are there some specific take-home message(s) to help improve people's everyday lives? Communication The presentation is easy to follow. Well paced. The narration does a very good job of explaining the ideas. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. Light coloured text is best on dark coloured backgrounds and vice-versa. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title and opening slide - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - review microphone set-up. Video recording quality was good. Image sources and their copyright status are indicated, but there are no active hyperlinks to the sources. A copyright license for the presentation is indicated in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided. Check fix typographical errors.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:14, 17 November 2019 (UTC)