Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Risky shift motivation

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:15, 1 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Description about self
  3. Link provided to book chapter
  4. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with links to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  2. Under-developed, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s).

Key points[edit source]

  1. Reduce overcapitalisation e.g., Risky Shift -> risky shift
  2. Lack of development.
  3. Lack of theory and research.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  7. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Wasn't cited.
  2. Less than 3 refs.
  3. For full APA style, use:
    1. correct capitalisation
    2. correct italicisation
    3. the new recommended format for dois
    4. no issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume (i.e., most of them).

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:30, 29 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

Contribution[edit source]

Hi I've just taken a look at your chapter, and there isn't a lot of information on the page as of yet, however im sure you will be adding it soon. I was researching this topic and came across a great website which introduces some theories for risky shift which may help you in explaining why risky shift is a phenomena and give examples that demonstrate what it is. I hope this helps you :) --U3160677 (discusscontribs) 03:54, 20 October 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Very useful descriptions of research studies as examples of risky shift.
  3. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter.
    3. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Learning features
    1. Use bullet-points (e.g., for See also and External links), per Tutorial 1.
    2. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1.
    3. No use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    4. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    5. Basic use of images.
    6. No use of tables.
    7. No use of feature boxes.
    8. Basic use of quizzes.
    9. Excellent use of example studies; consider including more case studies or examples.
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  4. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Risky Shift -> risky shift).
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    3. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:09, 24 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an very good presentation.
  2. The multimedia presentation should address the same topic as the book chapter.
  3. Excellent opening example and the corporate environment provides an interesting and useful context for the discussion of risky shift.
  4. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented, although the focus should be on risky shift motivation more broadly.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was OK.
  3. Visual display quality was excellent.
  4. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. No written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:20, 24 November 2019 (UTC)Reply