Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Organisational change motivation

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:03, 30 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Good; capitalisation adjusted

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent; description about self and link to book chapter
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure; consider abbreviating some headings (e.g., the headings are somewhat long with "organisational change" repeated)

Key points[edit source]

  1. Expand the Overview but remove the sub-sections - the Overview should be a stand-alone section with no sub-headings.
  2. Key points are reasonably well developed for each section.
  3. Remove 1st person perspective.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Included

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
    3. Also link to past relevant chapters
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:26, 22 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. This is a super-impressive, top-notch chapter, with only very minor suggestions for improvement.
  2. I love the positively oriented focus on a real world, widespread phenomenon and the application of psychological theory and research.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The most relevant theories are well selected, described, and concisely explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Excellent summary and integration.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
    2. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. Good use of tables.
    5. Good use of feature boxes.
    6. No use of quizzes.
    7. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    2. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
  5. APA style
    1. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. (Van den Broeck, et al., 2016) -> (Van den Broeck et al., 2016)
      2. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      3. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~10 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence; valuable engagement that genuinely helped others

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:08, 14 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an solid presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Excellent take-away messages.
  2. Reasonably well selected and structured content. Perhaps too much is covered, with too little elaboration. Consider being more selective. However, the presentation does effectively cover the book chapter content.
  3. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  4. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow to follow.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Reasonably well paced. At times perhaps it is a little fast.
  4. The font size in some places could be made larger to make it easy to read.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The full chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was good. There are some very minor fade outs.
  4. Image sources and their copyright status are provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:43, 15 November 2019 (UTC)Reply