Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Goal framing theory

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Hi,

I found this cool resources that might help develop your applications of goal framing theory section.

Financial Behavior Change and Progress Toward Self-Sufficiency: A Goal-Framing Theory Application (https://doi.org/10.1177%2F2167696819861467)

I think this one is particuarly useful in that it's cohort was emerging adults, allowing it to be applied to in particular students who may read this.

Hope it's helpful --Joshgrain (discuss • contribs) 12:18, 21 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I like the use of your headings. You may consider putting more external links in at the bottom so users can further elaborate on the theories. That way you will save words in your word count and help users follow your work. --BMPENFOLD (discuss • contribs) 02:43, 13 October 2019 (UTC)

This looks like a really great topic development. I hope your study is going well offline. Depending on where you are at in your research I would like to suggest an article I found on a goal framing approach in a hedonistic shift. All the best for you book chapter.

https://journals-sagepub-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/doi/full/10.1177/1043463118795719

--U3100384 (discuss • contribs) 00:50, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Clear, with direct link to evidence Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies to help illustrate theoretical concepts. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image Provided, with an APA style caption. Consider enhancing figure captions to help connect the image more strongly to key points being made in the text Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Resources Good Use bullet-points See also - use internal wiki links for Wikipedia pages

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:56, 24 September 2019 (UTC)

@Samuel Moorby: See suggestion above about using interwiki links (rather than external links) when linking to Wikipedia articles. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:20, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Point of view

@Samuel Moorby: I recommend using 3rd person perspective rather first person perspective (e.g., we, our).[1] Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:26, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter that does a reasonably good job of reviewing relevant theory and research and provides some practical examples. The quality of written expression is below professional standard. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. To improve, provide more detail about GFT and less about the other theories. Research Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression The quality of written expression is below professional standard. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Rewrite the chapter without using "we". Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Learning features Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of images. No use of tables. Good use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Good use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. APA style Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure. References are not in full APA style. For example: See new doi format. Social contribution ~3 logged, minor, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:39, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

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Overall The presentation topic (GFT and climate change) does not match the book chapter topic (GFT). Climate change could be used an example, but the goal of the presentation was to provide an overview of the psychological theory and research about GFT. Overall, this is an promising presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Good explanation of GFT in 0-2 mins. Minute 3 deviates into climate change and lacks a clear Conclusion with practical, take-home messages. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Perhaps include other examples rather than only use climate change as an example. Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality Check and correct spelling (e.g., environmental). Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video recording quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are provided, but without active hyperlinks. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the description, but not the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:54, 17 November 2019 (UTC)