Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Cannabis and negative emotions

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:12, 21 October 2016 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a strong chapter.
  2. The chapter is well-balanced, without overemphasing/overgeneralising from the research evidence.
  3. The chapter is over the maximum word-count.
  4. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. I removed about 400 words mostly by simplifying the written expression, but another 300 or so words need go.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is well covered and explained.
  2. Use of case study was helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. An excellent range of research studies are discussed and integrated with theory.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The chapter is well-written.
    1. The Overview and Conclusion are clear and well-written.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well-structured.
    2. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
  3. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes good use of interwiki links.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are very good.
  5. APA style
    1. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:09, 24 October 2016 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Overview
    1. Excellent
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Probably too much content is presented - felt a bit rushed - be more selective - e.g., work backwards from 3 take-home messages to work out what content needs to be presented - and then focus on only that which is essential to conveying these messages.
    2. Theory rich
    3. Good, effective consideration
    4. Nuanced, balanced consideration
    5. Addresses a self-help theme.
    6. Citations and references are included.
  3. Conclusion
    1. Good audio conclusion.
    2. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio
    1. Audio is too fast - consider slowing down. See this article for more information about speaking rates.
    2. Leave longer pauses between sentences.
    3. Otherwise, is clear and well-paced.
    4. Perhaps enhance intonation to help engage listeners.
  2. Visuals
    1. Basic - approximately half a dozen text-based slides with some images.
    2. Consider using more slides with less text and larger font on each slide.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
    2. Add a link to the book chapter.
    3. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Medium low due to white noise.
    2. Consider using an external microphone to improve audio recording quality.
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Effective use of simple tools.
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the meta-data or the visual presentation).
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:12, 22 November 2016 (UTC)Reply