Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Season and emotion

Comments

Hi! I have a useful article for you. The article addresses how vitamin D can impact mental disorders and executive cognitive functions. As your book chapter is on seasons and emotion, you could discuss how lack of sunlight (during winter) may impact emotional health and brain functioning. Hope you find the source useful! Source: Durson, S. (2010). Vitamin D for mental health and cognition. Canadian Medical Association Journal, 182(17). --U3082322 (discuss • contribs) 08:16, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Helpful article

Hopefully this is a helpful article, looking at different types of weather and their affect on mood and emotion. Denissen, J. J., Butalid, L., Penke, L., & Van Aken, M. A. (2008). The effects of weather on daily mood: a multilevel approach. Emotion, 8(5), 662. https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/User:U3127811

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:39, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a chapter which could be improved by . Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory coverage is reasonably solid, but could provide more depth. Examples may be helpful. Research Research coverage is reasonably solid, but could provide more depth. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Excellent overview Conclusion is rather brief; expand to communicate key points. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). Layout Add bullet-points for See also and External links See earlier comments about heading casing Provide more explanatory Figure and Table captions. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links. More interwiki links could be added to make the text more interactive. Remove or reupload Figure 2 with appropriate licensing details. Provide greater integration with other related book chapters. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). Direct quotes need page numbers. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:39, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Theory was reasonably well covered. Include citations about evidence for claims. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful. Communication Audio is somewhat difficult to follow - perhaps because it is quite quiet, slightly distorted, and a little on the fast side. clear and well-paced. Visuals are clear and easy to read, although it could help to summarise key points rather than displaying full sentences from the script. Including images could help to make for a more dynamic presentation. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement. Production quality Fill out the description field (e.g., subtitle, brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions). Audio volume is quiet - I could just hear it with volume at maximum - check microphone set up. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:53, 26 November 2015 (UTC)