Talk:Representation of Eating Disorders in To the Bone

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Sandbox Cbline (discusscontribs) 17:45, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestion for the incorporation of more resources either through a resource page/section or incorporated within the text (group Arlene 12:30)

Might want to touch on the other eating disorders in the film such as the binge-eating with the woman eating peanut butter and the woman who was pregnant

Could touch on the prevalence of male vs female eating disorders especially due to the fact that there was only one male in treatment

Could touch on other disorders that are commonly comorbid with eating disorders and have links to sites with information on those disorders and how comorbid symptoms are treated.

Some citations are only DOIs and should instead include the full reference. Rehorowitz (discusscontribs) 19:40, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Unnecessary Sentence;[edit source]

This section will evaluate the representation of eating disorders in this movie as well as to provide resources for seeking help and treatment and to provide accurate information about eating disorders. - This sentence could be removed, as this is an unnecessary introduction. Furthermore, this page would be used to do so, but not the introductory section. (discuss) 18:28, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Extremely Clunky Paragraph;[edit source]

"Costs of a facility are reliant on the length of stay and eating disorder. Inpatient facilities cost more than outpatient treatment[28]. Inpatient costs constitute the expensive part of treatment.[29] Costs for anorexia nervosa are higher than those of bulimia nervosa and non specified eating disorders due to the need for a longer stay[28]. The cost of stay for a female patient at an inpatient facility, on average, is $12,432. The average cost for a male patient is $10,126.[28] The costs of eating disorders are similar to those of schizophrenia, but they are less than those of obsessive compulsive disorder. This is due to eating disorders leading to other co-occurring medical issues, many of which may require medical interventions.[28] Patient body mass index (BMI) can also affect hospitalization cost[29]. Total cost can decrease for small increases in BMI[29]. If the BMI is higher at admission, it means less time needed for rehabilitation and weight gain. The younger a patient is, the lower the hospitalization cost will be. Having a younger age also increases the length of inpatient stay, since the body is still undergoing growth and development while also having to restore to a normal weight[29]."

1) While this sentence is information dense, it fails to be concise. Each sentence is broken into parts that are clunky separately.

Suggested change:

"Costs of treatment in a facility are reliant upon the length of the stay and the type of eating disorder. Inpatient facilities are far more expensive than outpatient treatment and make up a majority of the cost associated with treatment. Treatment for anorexia nervosa is more expensive than is treatment for bulimia nervosa and non-specified eating disorders due to longer duration recovery in an inpatient facility." (discuss) 18:37, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

2) The cost seems to be irrelevant for the article. While it's nice to have a comparison point, someone with Anorexia Nervosa would benefit by knowing the average cost of the treatment, not the average cost of other mental illnesses. They're entirely irrelevant. (discuss) 18:37, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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Needs to be edited for clarity: "However, this film can illustrate that males are less affected by eating disorders or less susceptible to having eating disorders by including only one male or acknowledges the fact that males can have eating disorders, but just not as often as females."

Film vs. Research[edit source]

It is very unclear what is specifically within the film and what's research supporting the film. It would help to clearly state, "In the film...." and "This is supported by..."

Another idea research is clearly stated in a separate paragraph and then the paragraph after address the stated information with examples in the movie (clearly stating "in the movie").

Expansion of Physical Signs[edit source]

The only included physical signs are amenorrhea and lanugo - Ellen's low boy weight and cold body temperature could also be included. This section could be expanded by including typical physical warning signs and symptoms found in individuals with anorexia. Rehorowitz (discusscontribs) 19:41, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]