Talk:Peak oil, energy, and society/Caleb's page

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Nice job, Caleb. I will say, the writing, per se, needs a lot of editing to be more readable. But the critical thinking is there, and you set the context and explain well the idea of making building materials from recycled materials. Three ideas for improvement:

  • read over it and edit grammar, typos, and sentence arrangement to improve readability. Maybe even get a friend or writing teacher to provide edits? I'd be happy to edit it but I want to do it with you as a teaching exercise if I do.
  • expand your pros and cons; I don't mean how many pros you give, I mean explain each one more fully. For instance, why is bamboo more resilient? What materials would end up in landfills?
  • add some links so people can see these things -- or maybe a link to the Trustees of Reservations site in Leominster. But I'll talk about this last idea in class another day.