Talk:Motivation and emotion/Textbook/Emotion/Theories/Cognitive

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Overall Overall, this is a solid CR-level textbook chapter. The chapter provides a useful review of cognitive theoretical perspectives of emotion, making effective use of critical thinking, research, examples and additional learning features such as a quiz. The main area for improvement is in the quality of written expression, particularly spelling and proofreading. Theory I'm not sure if the snake is a good example of Schacter's emotion theory because of all stimuli, our fear response to a snake is strongly innate. Better to use a more ambiguous stimulus. Research Research comment When describing important research findings, try to indicate the size of effects rather than simply whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The chapter could have benefited from a more developed introduction, with clear focus questions. Getting comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped with this aspect. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned" Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Learning features Wiki-links would have been helpful. Image captions would have been helpful. Spelling, grammar and proofreading Check use of ownership apostrophes - see my edits for examples Better proofreading reading e.g., to remove unnecessary spaces and capitals - see my edits for examples. their -> there APA style Do not cite the year for subsequent citations within a paragraph e.g., Smith (2010) but after that in the same paragraph only refer to Smith. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Direct quotes need page numbers.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:14, 12 December 2010 (UTC)