Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Smiling and emotion

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter. Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand The sub-title has been corrected to match the index of topics Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan via the topic development exercise could have helped to improve the chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Not developed Theory – Breadth There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Overly detailed description of facial muscles involved in smiling; summarise and focus on the relationship between smiling and emotion Overly general description of emotion; focus instead on the relationship between smiling and emotion Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Build more strongly on other *-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/*) Theory – Depth Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources Research – Key findings Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Summarise key points Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet points into full paragraph format Some sentences are overly long (unnecessarily wordy). Strive for the simplest expression of the point being made. At the very least, consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences. Some sentences could be explained more clearly (e.g., see the and tags) Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.[1] Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') [2] Use serial commas[3] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation, capitalisation, and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Write numbers under 10 using words (e.g., five). Write numbers 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are well captioned Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Figure 3 missing? Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Separate multiple citations in parentheses using a semicolon References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Insufficient use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) No use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

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